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Ashley123

  • Short Story » General, General Re: First post

    First off, welcome to YWS. I hope to read more of your future posts. Anyway, I really loved your first piece. Firstly because of the fact that it was short. ...

    Aug 2, 2016
  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Historical Fiction Re: The Painter

    I thought that this was a great and inspirational short story. I liked how the main character over came an obstacle, even though her mother said that she couldn't do ...

    Aug 1, 2016
  • Short Story » Realistic, Culture Re: This world is so messed up this doesn't deserve a title

    I thought that this was actually a pretty truthful and meaningful short story. Because honestly, the world is pretty messed up, and I'm glad that someone wrote an emotional, truthful ...

    Jul 30, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Search For Peace Book 1 ~ The Great Separation Chapter 1

    I loved this chapter. It was AMAZING! All of the events that happened in the prologue became somewhat explained in this piece, which I really liked by the way. Your ...

    Jul 23, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Search For Peace Book 1 ~ The Great Separation Prologue

    I thought that this was an AMAZING start to a new novel. Now I did notice a few errors, but nothing that can't be fixed. "She was shaking and looked ...

    Jul 5, 2016
  • Article / Essay » Narrative, Realistic Re: The One with Stray Dogs and Visitors at Midnight

    I thought that this was an amazing piece of writing! It really showed the dark truth about how people honestly have a hard time trusting anymore (it is the era ...

    Jun 29, 2016
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Historical Fiction Re: The Land of Books

    I thought that this was a good start to an interesting story. But honestly I had no idea what this was really about. It was very confusing with the random ...

    Jun 29, 2016
  • Other » Narrative, Spiritual Re: Fire

    I really loved the type of language you used. The descriptive words that really made a vivid picture in my mind. I really love your mysterious writing style, and the ...

    Jun 22, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Realistic Re: Breaking News

    This was a very good start to a novel, and the plot looks like it has real potential. The only thing that confused me was how this seemed more like ...

    Jun 16, 2016
  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Run Back

    I thought that this was a very nice piece about love and loss. I really could feel the emotion and heart ache buried deep within the story. It was like ...

    Jun 16, 2016
  • Article / Essay » Spiritual, General Re: Dare not Blame God For Everything...

    I really liked this piece. It really expressed all of my morals and values about God. I agree with you 100% with everything that you expressed here. I did notice ...

    Jun 14, 2016
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Realistic Re: What Happened to the Dragons?

    I really liked this short story. It was a neat way to describe how and why these creatures disappeared, well done. I did see a few minor mistakes, but as ...

    Jun 14, 2016
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Spiritual Re: my smile is a hiding place, but it doesn't hide my heart

    Once again, this is a very nice and well organized poem. I really liked the story that it painted in my mind. Good job. This is very nice. I don't ...

    Jun 12, 2016
  • Other » General, Narrative Re: Thinking

    I like this a lot. It really shows a lot of personal deep down emotions, which is a very good way to get good writing like this. Often time stories ...

    Jun 12, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Spiritual Re: A World Made of Watercolours

    This was a pretty good poem I have to say. And the part that I liked the most, was that it was short! Shhh, don't tell the other poets. Anyway, ...

    Jun 11, 2016


People find it far easier to forgive others for being wrong than being right.
— Albus Dumbledore