Grace slid her hand over the doll’s face. She could feel the thread that fastened each button to the cloth. She was too old for dolls, but it was one of the few things her mother gave her. She placed her doll down and pushed herself off the ground. With her hands out in front of her, she stepped forward. One two three four... She counted each step in her head. Her mother let out a pained sigh; it sounded like exasperation and walked out of the room. Her heels clicked on the tile, and annoyance rang with each clack. Grace knew her mother was ashamed of her. Her older sisters were normal. She could feel the way her mother radiated pride when they were around. She didn't receive the same love.
As she bumped into the table, she felt around.
There was the pungent smell of paint in the air stronger than it was on the
rug. Her entire family consisted of successful artists. Her mother was always
praising her sister's work. She had asked one day if she could paint as well,
but her mother had just scoffed.
"You a blind girl, paint? You can't see let
alone create a picture." Her mother had sputtered.
Grace felt around the table until she found a
tube of paint. She gripped the cap and turned it until it came off. She
squeezed all the paint out of the tube onto the table in anger. She could hear
her mother's past words ringing in her ears. She felt the cool liquid on her
fingers and made patterns and shapes, painting. The world was vast and
confusing, but one thing was clear. She was Grace and no matter what her mother
said she could do anything.
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An inspirational and relatable story! I relate to how her mother doubts she can paint because she is blind, and yet she overcame the obstacle. It inspires me and fills me with the same feeling of triumph Grace felt. I can really sympathize with Grace. No grammar mistakes or inconsistencies that I can find, the flow of the story is good and the message of the story is clear. All in all, great story! Keep up the good work.
I thought that this was a great and inspirational short story. I liked how the main character over came an obstacle, even though her mother said that she couldn't do it. This made this really an enjoyable read, and I'd love to read more stuff like this from you in the future. Now, I saw nothing really wrong with this short story at all. I didn't see any grammatical errors, or story transition inconsistency. This was GREAT. I have nothing bad to say about this. Keep writing and never stop. You have a great use of words, that just make the story flow nicely.
Continue writing.
-Ashley123
This is so sweet. I love how inspiring this is. A girl who was born into this world blind, wanting to paint a picture, knowing she will never be able to enjoy it's beauty. You understand this character very well, with describing sound, texture, and thoughts. Grace is such a determined girl. She won't let anybody stop her. How depressing would it be to be born into a family of artists, but not have sight? This is the one of the best short stories i've ever read. I want to see you do more with Grace.