Breaking News

by MandlynProductions

Published June 16, 2016

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In Horror

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These recordings were salvaged before operation Armageddon was to commence. 

(The footage starts with a tan blonde woman sitting quietly as a camera zooms in.)

"Just in, a bizarre atmospheric occurrence is inspiring wonder, and leaving others in fear."

"All of this and more coming right up."

(Commercials play until news interrupts.)

"Breaking news, 23 passenger planes have gone missing, and all of them seem to be linked to the occurrence, we have audio recordings and footage, but it is not recommended for young or sensitive audience members."

(Grainy footage plays of someone looking out of a window to see a large opening in the once crowded clouds, it last for about 10 seconds before the footage cuts out.)

(The audio recording starts, a male is screaming in a foreign language as the sound of other people screaming, the dismantle of metal, and a loud crunching noise can be heard as the footage cuts out.)

(The footage then shows a slightly pale, brown-haired man standing next to what most people would consider a elderly homeless man.)

"Alright sir, what do you think is causing all of these disappearances?" 

"I think that something is up in the clouds, stealing our planes, and messing up the atmosphere, I honestly think it is aliens who stole those planes."

(As the homeless man said this, the interviewer disrespectfully laughed at the ludicrous idea, back at the station, the tan blonde also laughed at the ridiculous proposition.)

(After they were done laughing, seemingly out of spite, the interview finished after the first of five-teen questions.)

(The camera turned back to the blonde woman in the stereotypical weather room.)

"Well, that's all for today, so see you tomorrow, this is WNIN, signing off."

(WNIN stands for Weather National and International News.)

(On a weather show, we see a Meteorologist speaking of a 1000 foot wide hole, and how all of the planes flew into the hole at some point.)

(On a different channel, we see a biologist taking about how no artificial aircraft could possible make this hole and something organic had to make it.)

(The next day we get back to the blonde woman's work station with a very worried look on her face.)

"Good evening everyone, my name is Mary Mckerel and today we have some very interesting news, it seems that a biplane we sent caught some very interesting footage of what appears to be a flying creature, viewer discretion advised."  

(The camera cuts to a mediocre camera attached to the plane as for a brief second, a large, red and black mass, can be seen flying through the clouds at phenomenal speed.)

(The mass flies upwards, only showing it's crustacean-like tail ascending upwards, it's tail turned to look like a side-ways U, about 20 seconds later, after some censored profanity, the footage cuts out.)

(About a hour later, the news turns back on showing people protesting airports with signs like Were not flying until we get our planes back, Then a calm voice describes the situation to the viewers.)

(at around 10 PM, we cut back to the blonde woman, a unusual amount of concern in her expression.)

"Good evening folks, it appears that the occurrence has made it's way down to the border between Mexico and the United States, there were large bulges in the ground, let's take a look."

(A helicopter view shows a large straight upward bulge in the ground for about 5 seconds, then, it shows a village, already plagued with poverty, partially destroyed by the bulge, which had two, large holes on the sides.)

"When we went to interview some of the locals about the occurrence, we found traces of blood, but everybody was missing."

"Well, good evening folks, we will have more news tomorrow."

(The next day the brown haired man was sitting in the seat.)

"Good morning folks, we have a special report today, it appears that a large, stone tower is rising from the ground."

(The camera zooms in, observing a large, pulsating tower, growing by the minute, killing all plant life around it.)

"What this is, nobody knows, but the local police have put a electric fence around the structure, stating that they lost two officers trying to enclose the thing and that it is extremely dangerous."

"Alright, see you all later."

(About two hours later, we cut back to the blonde woman with a terrified expression on her face.)

"Breaking news, the tower has erupted like a volcano and sprouted, what ever this thing is."

(The blonde covered her eyes and wept, the was terrified.)

(The pulsating tower, after growing 1000 feet in diameter near a jungle erupted, revealing a bulky humanoid with six arms, a disgust red skin, constantly pulsating, a demonic face, and two, thick wings.)

(The being was massive, probably 600 feet tall at least, then it turned to the camera and several people hiding behind a pick-up truck.)

(The abomination spoke, in a deep, rumbling, otherworldly voice.)

"Now who are hiding from, me probably, now there is no real need to fear me, for, I am what you humans perceive as god."

"And your respond with fear and resistance, that's disrespectful, now it time for a punishment."

 (The abomination spoke as all of the ground, including the humans turned into pulsating veins, after this, the two Spanish men were dead.)

"Now why are you being so inconsiderate, come out and meet your new god."

The rest of the news report could not be salvaged, and operation Armageddon was to begin in the next 24 hours after the footage was taken. 

 

  

 

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Laurenh6
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Laurenh6 wrote a review Review · Jun 23, 2016

Hi there- I feel that this was a very unusual and intriguing start to a story. I haven't seen many novels set out the way this one is.. that's what makes your writing very unique in addition to the plot. I loveeee horror stories (written one myself) and your character of the "demonic" creature truly is so awesome! I love how you've said about his "pulsating veins" that is so vivid in imagery - love it!

Furthermore, this story is soo realistic in its little details. I love how you've mentioned and noted how the "camera zooms in" or the "commercials plays".. This makes the situation so vivid in my mind - your description is not overdone but perfect so well done.

Third of all, from my perspective it seems at first these news reporters are emotionless in the way they act at the start... not much description or elaboration on it. But I feel that's quite effective because they don't show their emotion in real life TV news really...and then I like how it all sort of changes suddenly with the woman "terrified" to emphasize how scary this is.

My only criticism is the part where you say "everybody was missing" - I feel like that should of been expanded on a little more.. because the news would probably reassure everyone things were going to be ok. At least that's my opinion

Hope this helps ! Your writing is awesome :P

It's your lucky day, there is a prequel.
Breaking News-The Monolith

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Ashley123
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Ashley123 wrote a review Review · Jun 16, 2016

This was a very good start to a novel, and the plot looks like it has real potential. The only thing that confused me was how this seemed more like a script to me than the start to a novel. I really do like the plot that you have going on, and I would love to read more of this. Now there were some minor mistakes that I did notice. First off:

"(After they were done laughing, seemingly out of spite, the interview finished after the first of five-teen questions.)" here I was very confused when you said "five-teen". Did you mean "fifteen"? Because I think that's probably what you meant here in this sentence. As well to this:

"Were not flying until we get our planes back, Then a calm voice describes the situation to the viewers.)" here you used "were" instead of "we're". Because you are basically saying "we are" in the beginning of the sentence, it has to be "we're" since it's a combination between we and are. Also:

"Now who are hiding from, me probably, now there is no real need to fear me, for, I am what you humans perceive as god." here you should add a "you" between "are" and "hiding" so that the sentence says, "Now who are you hiding from,". Just so that it makes more sense, other than those few mistakes I see nothing really wrong with this. Keep on writing this, I would love to find out more about the plot. Never stop writing. :)

The story is not a script, I made it entirely from perspectives of news channels, I made it as accurately as how the media would react to a occurrence like this.

Well, you want more plot, you got more plot.Breaking News-The Monolith

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Eros
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Eros wrote a review Review · Jun 16, 2016

Hello there, MandlynProductions!

This is Eros here to write a review for this beautiful stuff!

First of all, I see that you are new here. So, a warm welcomt to YWS! If you have any problem, feel free to talk to me. Hope you are enjoyiing here!

Now to the work... I see that the title is very catchy and captivating. These are the characteristics of a good title.

The next thing is the theme and the main idea which form the basis of a stuff. The chapter is full of mystery and suspense with the spices of horror and shock. I liked it.

The whole thing was a telecast. All the scenes are described beautifully. The choice of set of the words is also very good.
One small nit-picky though,

(The blonde covered her eyes and wept, the was terrified.)

I think it should be she...
Rest, everything was awesome.
It will be an interesting novel.
Keep writing...
Never cease...
Because we all love to keep reading such awesome and unique works like this one!
HAve a great da/evenng!
Keep smiling...
:D

Thanks for the praise, but I am not someone who often smiles

I take my writing, my philosophies, and life very seriously.

Eros replied · Jun 17, 2016

They were never praise... It was just the reality put into soft words.
It's okay. Everyone has their own and unique personalities.

Well if you want a seuqel, you got a sequel, except it's a prequel.



As if you were on fire from within. The moon lives in the lining of your skin.
— Pablo Neruda