Armadian

The descriptions were wonderful and I can't wait to read more. I have the same question as Rieda.

I agree with what Snoink said, and I also think you should try putting it into stanza's.

Yep, the point of view works perfectly and I already told you I love your story!

I read this already, so your wondering why it didn't take me too long to critique it. Is this based off Final Fantasy 12? I liked how you fully described ...

I was thinking the same of as all of you. I think I might go free verse and describe the leaves blowing around or something. Hmm....

Myth pretty much got everything. Its an awesome story, and I can't wait to read more! Keep writing!

I haven't seen a cinquain in a while either. Both of them were nicely written! Great job!

Again, another well written poem. Are you sure you are new to poetry? It seems like you've been writing for ages. Great job!

I love how you wrote this! Good job, and everyones pretty much got all the problems in the poem! Great Job!

I loved the first one and the second one. I haven't had time to go and pick up the 3rd though.

First thing I see is, organization. It makes it hard to read. You should consider make stanza's at each period, but thats totally up to you. Anyways, great job, keep ...

I loved the last stanza like everyone else. I don't see anything wrong with it. It had a nice relaxing flow too. Good job and keep up the excelent writing!

This poem is very, interesting. It has a lot of feeling. Good job!

Lmao I laughed the whole way through it. I aint so sure about Santa now. :lol:

Wicked I need one for myself!