Areida

It was good. Nothing especially life altering or exceptionally original, but you got the point across in a short, succinct manner. Nice.

I didn't know you could use a flat piece of land for transportation. Psst... it's plane...

Too true, Shriek, too true.

Hmm... I like it... It's odd, but most definitely original. I think my favourite line was about why the library had to stay so quiet if people weren't going to ...

Yeah, but I'm beginning to think it's not in my nature to be useful... my critiques are too nice... I need to work on that... I think I'm too positive ...

*glances over at own sweater vest in the corner, the one that she will be wearing in less than four weeks* Yeah, let's not be too harsh on the sweater ...

Ooh, good way to put it Rei. That's a neat effect... make your reader feel the same as your protaganist... I like.

I didn't get it, but I miss Crysi too.

That was great... I love how you smashed words together; that makes for a really neat effect. I think my favourites were: "anxietyexcitementnervousnessexistencenumbness" and "throbbingsulkybrown eyes"

Ahahahahahahaa! *cracks up* I'm really, really tired right now so those are a lot more funny than they normally would be. *dies laughing* I am so naming my pencil Snapie!

I agree with Crysi and Hunter. I like how you have some good images but it's not so "poetic" that the reader (a.k.a. clueless me) have no idea what's going ...

Really? Cool! I'd like to read more of this style... it's really cool. Wait, that was redundant. Sorry, I'm tired. But what I'm trying to say is that I like ...

He really liked it. I was surprised... I thought he'd find it kind of trite, but he really loved it. Thanks for the encouragement, guys. I almost didn't give it ...

I love your metaphors. Do me a favour and get a collection of your poems published, okay?

Ditto Mesh. I wish I could comment on poetry in a coherent manner.