Areida

I really liked it. I don't read much sci-fi, so when I do it's fascinating to me. Don't ask why, it just is. The only thing I really disliked about ...

raise the red hot poker like some sort of respectful gesture then lower it into my skull and leave crimson imprints Wow...stunning imagery here. i don't want to be one ...

I love LotR... we read all of them (not the Simillarion, but including The Hobbit) as secondary readings in my Omnibus (history, literature, theology) class. I don't think they're too ...

Haha... that rocks!! Eh... no pun intended... But seriously, this was great. The opening line caught my attention for some reason and then once I got to the end it ...

Oh, Jack, this is beautiful. the sky is collapsing in polychromatic droplets staining my hair with the glitter from your aurulent wings and i slip and fall at your knees ...

Definitely need to break some lines up, add punctuation, check spelling, etc. Your closing line was quite good, and showed a lot of potential. I take the gun say my ...

Oh, Gal, I loved this. I know it's been awhile since you posted it, so what did your dad think? Did he cry, or is he not that kind of ...

It was okay. Swearing does NOT make you more mature, though. I cuss only when I'm too angry to come up with a better word. Honestly, if you can't find ...

I agree with Chevy. Good conceptually, and you have some really great lines and manage to create a pretty tense feel, even with some minor errors. With a smile on ...

Well, quite honestly, it's okay. Nothing profound, and no really great images, but okay. IT Coming closer and closer faster and faster. Teeth sharp as daggers paws so big , ...

Wow, Liz...that's great. I can't really critique it... It's great. I like your balance of anger and eloquence: that's really well done. The opening really caught my attention as well: ...

Haha, that's awesome, Sam! I love your writing; it's makes me sick that you're only 11... :roll: :roll: But just from the first four paragraphs I can tell that it ...

Beautiful, Jack, as usual. My favourite lines: on the stadium grass and sma- -sh against the advert boards Clever. you know i'd die for you if you stopped running from ...

It's okay...I have to agree with Mattie. It did seem to move really, really quickly and I never quite caught onto who was confused me. Maybe if I read it ...

It's...okay. Good conceptually (what girl doesn't have a little princess in her? :wink: ), but weak in many points. First of all, I was a little put-off by all of ...