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Quite honestly, it's trite. I didn't find it particularly gripping or original. It kind of reminded me of the live-action Scooby Doo movie they made a few years back... you ...

It was interesting... I liked it. I did like the way you started it, though. I don't think I'd change that. I do agree with Sarah, though; you need to ...

Eh... it's okay. It's real enough, I suppose, and your grammar and spelling are fine, but it's just... I guess it's just kind of boring. Add some more lively characters, ...

Good Lord, Dusky. No wonder you won "Best Writer"!! This was incredible. I loved it... it was clever, creative, evocative. Man. Maybe you could tweak it a bit to make ...

Hmm.... I liked it, but not as much as your others. but i'll still raise my glass and toast those dark ages because i'll always have the last laugh I ...

Mmm... I loved it. The idea itself seems rather contrived, but you carried it out beautifully. The whole thing gives me a feeling of longing, begging. It leaves me wanting ...

*rolls eyes* Leave it to Brad to smack down a great piece. I loved it. I don't really understand (big surprise, Ari not understanding something...) but still. It was well-written, ...

Wow... Tess... that's beautiful. One typo: (and the thought that I would pass you paints me, it really does) Did you mean pains ? But other than that, I can't ...

Well, I'm impressed. I couldn't write like you when I was eleven. El pretty much pointed all the grammatical/rephrasing things, so the only suggestion I can offer is to split ...

I am waaay too tired to do a proper crit, but I liked this. There were some good images: cradling the phone, carrying the razor down to the bathroom; I'm ...

It's not horrible or anything, just kind of typical. We live in a post-modernistic world, and so this kind of angry, hurt poem is found quite often. Add some creative ...

Wow. Even though this had lots of capitalization/punctuation/spelling/typing errors, it still struck a chord with me. I know exactly how you feel. My parents are divorced and I wanted to ...

Wow, I really wasn't expecting that. But it was good just the same. The only real suggestion I can make is to split it up into more paragraphs. Do that ...

Oh...creepy... I really liked it. At first I was kind of like, blah blah blah...undressing some dude in the cemetary...yeah, sounds like a trashy romance novel... but then it got ...

I loved it. I absently toy with dirtied, aged lace at my throat, and I just am . I feel whole. That was such a great section. I really don't ...