Freewrite

Thanks for the opinions.. I know it is typical, believe me. I will probably end up working on it a bit later.

This was unsatisfactory for someone looking for uncommon ideas. You pretty much said what every pent-up emotional teenager says in poetry, which is good for you, it's a great release, as Areida said, but for the rest of us...well, we all want what we ain't got. The more absurd we become, the better.

It's not horrible or anything, just kind of typical. We live in a post-modernistic world, and so this kind of angry, hurt poem is found quite often. Add some creative images, tell us something we haven't heard before. But don't get me wrong, it's not a bad poem. You did a good job, and I know how therapeutic freewrites can be.

in my blog, i wanted help figuring it out and here, i wanted help to make it a poem...

thanks

i dont understand this

why do i have to be so strange
is it me,
is it something ive done?

i want to get out of this life,
just get me out

it consumes me,
my mind and soul
it occupies my every thought, chewing up my mind

i cant get rid of it,
so just get me out of here,
off of this planet

into a place where pain is not longer evident

please, dear god, get me out
or is it satan that will help,

that can deliver me from this already horrific dead?

tell me now,
anyone, someone, please
tell me who can help
me get out

or is it up to me,
a slit,
a swallow, anything

to get me out of here