ArcticMonkey

Aloha Stelagineva, Here to review as requested! *puts on reviewing cape* I think that even though you were writing in first person, you portrayed Lizzie's character very well through the ...

Heya Rebel! This competition, is it from the Young Writers website? I was wondering, because I entered a few comps there which had the same sort of process. Anyway, moving ...

Heya Wheadee! This story's written in two points of view, this is the first person. VIVIAN We stood up on the balcony watching the mess that we had created. There ...

Hey Writerchick! “Oh come on L ea , don't be like that." Capital for a name, and you missed a comma :wink: “Go away.....I mean it." I said trying to ...

Hey Mikesly, Welcome to YWS (I can see that you're a newish member) *Aaron is walking down fifty-third street where he saw someone at a garage sale giving away mysterious ...

Hey babymagic! Deep within a forest haunted by stories of death and nightmares , there stands a single cottage .W ithin this cottage live three witches of great power named ...

Hey! I liked this, I was laughing at some bits, like: Maybe I know Somewhere deep in my soul That this isn’t real And I’ll end up dying in the ...

Hey Shubhi! I'm really not good at spotting mistakes like everyone else has. Although, you've seemed to change them. I did manage to spot a little typo though: She was ...

Hey jolene! I think its (not itZ haha) really short so there is not much to critique on actually. If you were to imagine this in a book, a prologue ...

I found this strange too. I also don't like that in such a short piece, you forgot to put capitals. Was the target audience kids? Because even if it was ...

Heya Ease! Welcome to YWS (I can see that you're a new member) First one: It's quite plain. There isn't much description although I'm sure once you pick one you'll ...

I HATE this book so much...all of Steinbeck's actually, just so boring and slow to me. GRRRR, best book I've ever read I know I'mm 11 and people ask me ...

Hello beckyfogarty, Now, this was ok, but I really think you need less dialogue more description. Like here: At school, it was the usual excitement of the first day back. ...

I really liked this, and all your edits which Skins pointed out. I kind of feel passionate about saving the tigers too. (You live in India (?)) I like how ...

I did laugh alot at this, it was a very funny script. It was inventive, and imaginative, I can't really write a proper review for this (as I would not ...