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Nice! I just got into the Creepy Pasta world. This sounds like Sally to me. I really like that you gave the reader a new view by having them be ...

"say I'm too young to love." That right there defines my life. Honestly, this poem is how I feel. It's like you looked into my heart, life, and mind and ...

Okay, first off, I have to address this before finishing the poem... But you DO NOT need to have those slash marks there! I understand that they are meant to ...

OH. MY. GOOD. NESS. *freaks out* I LOVE IT This poem feels like it was written for me. I have no problems with the grammar or the punctuation at all. ...

That's really cool getting selected for that Autumn! But let's get started. You have no punctuation what so ever which make thing confusing. If you want to do that every ...

Okay, to be honest, I have to read this a few times to get any feeling out of it. That's not good. Poetry is all about feeling and emotion. When ...

I LOVE that the feeling of hope was constant throughout the poem! Anyway... Your title doesn't sit with the story really well. The 'doctor' theme only shows up about half-way ...

Hey! Thanks for tagging me! Anyway! Toooooo the review! So, for the most part, it's fine. You have minor spelling errors but, I'll get to them later. What I really ...

Hey! Just dropping in for a review! I'll start with the actual English and flow of the poem then get into the mushy stuff. So, let's get started! In the ...

Another title could be "Forbidden Love"... OMG!! I love forbidden love stories! I can see this becoming a full out story. Anyway, I have no critiques for you. It's well ...

Nice work. I know how this feels. I was there once. Went through the five stages of grief myself. There are so many people like this and the will never ...

Okay, this is good but you need a little help. "Her hair, soft and chocolate, even cuter short then when she let it down." The end is confusing and it ...

In your first stanza, you said 'Shepherd lost', and Jesus is known as the Shepherd. He never lost. Yes, he was crucified, but he never lost. Also, you talk about ...

Okay, this is going to annoy me if I don't fix it or mention it. You don't motion for a horse to follow you like you do humans, you gently ...

OMG!! SQUEE!! So cute. Okay *deep breath* Here we go~ Character ~Filianna Okay, I can see the stubborn reluctance but there's a hint of sass in there too. Love that. ...