Anamel

I don't even know how really to explain this but it made me feel some sort of connection to what you're writing. It's weird but it's like an indescribable emotion ...

The writing of this was really surreal and its oddness made me keep reading. It was surprising to see it was narrated by a twenty-year-old as he has the mindset ...

I feel like this poem represents a strong feeling of longing, like being comfortable with the cycle of life you have now but looking out the window and wondering what ...

Off the bat, I'm gonna assume this is a diary. I pictured her with a nasally voice reading this, like a kind of cliche popular girl voice. From what I ...

Hey! Hopefully leaving some tips that can be helpful to you. The first thing I noticed was the format. It could drive readers away because it's blocky. I suggest splitting ...

Oftentimes on holidays, especially Christmas, the works around it tend to be cheerful or have some positive connotation. It's interesting to see a poem that takes the family-oriented, gift-giving holi

I think this is a poem a lot of people could relate to so that's a plus. The setup of it I know is intentionally in a repetitive scheme although ...

The introduction is certainly attention-grabbing. I think it's great for making a new reader continue to read on, like a hooker in an essay. Because it's the beginning, it will ...

The descriptions are detailed and in-depth, painting a picture for the reader as they follow along with the story. It seems kind of like a diary entry or witness account. ...

The descriptions you give paint the picture clearly in my mind. The brass, the chilled metal, the earrings, how it glints in the light. I'm not sure why, but it ...

I like how short it is, honestly. It's not even really that short, kind of just in the middle. It gets its point across well in a humorous way. Also ...

Hey, dropping in for a review! I'll just get right into it. "The next two week flew by in repetition, Roland spent most of his day in the gym, and ...

Heya! Here to hopefully be of some help. I'll just get right into it. "The deck of the ship, radiant, was slick with blood. " I think Radiant is the ...

The emphasis on the eyes automatically reminded me of that phrase that eyes are reflections or mirrors of the soul. "Through glass-blue, no, black eyes, I, the coward, observe." Automatically ...

I think it's good in the form of storytelling but my concern is if this is what the college you're applying to is looking for. It's uncertain whether or not ...