AmourDevorant

First, I think you could make your piece sound more eloquent by titling it "Brevity." (Plus, you've written such a short piece, so the title would be double applicable.) "Shortness" ...

Your pacing is good, and it's clear that you would make a very good storyteller, BUT... you have got to weed out all of these unnecessary adjectives and adverbs. They ...

Free form is one of those things that people often use as an excuse for having no talent, and I'm glad to see some substance finally! It's refined, and your ...

A constant fear settled itself in the pit of her stomach as she opens the door to the hospital visitor’s car park. She noticed every wall was shielded by shadows. ...

Ok! You wanted my review, here it is! First, I will say kudos for you to being so graphic with such a taboo subject. Secondly: you must keep 100 internet ...

You know, I thought this almost read like a very sweet Valentine's Day card until the last line. Why the twist? Our secretmeetingsin at the park. The secret passion filled ...

The first stanza is AWESOME. I love this so much :D The second stanza lacks the ease of the first, the rhyming seems a little forced and the meter strained. ...

I was hoping this was about Sailor Jerry! My first experience with alcohol was with Sailor Jerry. Cool bottle, bad idea lol. I can't tell what rhyme scheme you're going ...

While this is a haiku in form, it's not a haiku in spirit. The language you're using is too abstract and metaphoric. What you've written brings a view of a ...

Whaaaat? How crazy :D I'm not sure how to critique this, it being a series of diary entries and thus very "personal" to the character. I like the outrageous sense ...

I like the Egyptian pantheon, though I'm probably missing out on the metaphors/allusions. The opening stanza is lovely, almost hypnotic, and I expected to be carried away into some lilting ...