The shortness of life is what makes complication so unnecessary. A child see's what he wants and gets it. An adult see's what he wants and thinks about if he needs it, if he can get it, if he should get it, and countless many more if's. Through the eyes of a child, 1=1. Through the eyes of an adult, the same equation. May be riddled with endless variables. The same thing is needlessly dressed up. Simplify. Reduce the variables to what is truly necessary. Otherwise, to make mistakes is to live life. If we should encounter a thousand problems in our lifetime, the man who correctly solves every one is non-existent. The man who makes mistakes and is still happy is the one deserving of life. The two extremes are in all of us. The balance of which to amplify at a given moment is the skill of living. We can act on our impulses or stare at the complication but neither would go far. So find a balance. Look at it through the eyes of an adult and a child. The child does not expect. The adult expects. The child does not fear. The adult fears. A combination of the two is potently beautiful. Perfection is demoralizing so do not strive for it. Allow the mistakes but accept that life is too short to spend contemplating what one could've done. Life is too short to spend dwelling in sadness. Defeat the scale, if one decides to be happy, then one can be happy. Reality is irrelevant. If one tries, one can always find a reason to smile. To live life in sadness, emptiness, and disappointment is to adhere to reality. So live life to its greatest. Put aside what happened yesterday. The child moves on. The adult does not. Life is to be enjoyed, do not deprive yourself of such a privilege.
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First of all you don't write sees like this. "See's" The word is a verb, therefore, it cannot own anything.
Also the words in this pieces are full of generalizations. Such as,
"A child sees what it wants and gets it." And, "An adult sees what it wants and thinks about if it needs it. These generalizations are too annoying for me too read. They just make me turn away from a good stroy like this one. Just by reading this I can tell you are just starting out. Try and do a bit better next time. A single mistake can go a long ways!!!
First, I think you could make your piece sound more eloquent by titling it "Brevity." (Plus, you've written such a short piece, so the title would be double applicable.)
"Shortness" is not quite the proper word when talking about lifespan. You can say someone lived a short life, but a short life is characterized by its brevity, not its shortness. Or you could speak of life's "ephemeral nature," but that might be a bit too lofty...
There are a few punctuation mistakes, but overall I think you have a good message here -- rather Zen. You are hitting at so many things that could be elaborated on. Granted, you're advocating less complication in life, but this is a concept easy enough to read about but very difficult to put into practice -- so explain a bit more, flesh this out and justify your generalizations.
Thanks for your feedback! I'll definitely try to improve. I typed this late at night on my ipod when i had the thought so i did not take much time to elaborate on things. I just let it flow out of my mind.