Amice

7/10 perhaps I enjoyed it, but it didn't make me want to go out and buy everything he's written.

Oh, well excuse me, Firestarter :) I'm from Ohio, so I'm sorry for my Ohio-an critique :P -Amice-

hmm... not bad... The second stanza seems to be out of place here... * spell out the word four -Amice-

Excuse me. The question was not could I add to it or do I have a right to ... It is a matter of opinion concerning the value of the ...

Mkay I'm going to rewrite this whenever I get the chance. Angel, I agree, I'd like to make it longer, and yes, the third stanza needs smoothed out. Brian, the ...

Mkay, I made a few alterations... is this any better?? :-k In the moment of anguish I was numb to the pain That was silently killing my spirit. Now the ...

Aahhh... I love it.!!! I feel like this was written from my heart! Just to combine the first two reviews, I don't think it's too short, and I don't care ...

This little tale is kind of depressing! But that is likely your intention, I'm sure. I suppose it was... After a terribly emotional experience... I was so upset I thought ...

PLEASE someone say SOMETHING ?!?! :shock:

do you mean self is dying because you become one with another person so it's not just you anymore? Poppi, Yes that's the general idea. Love gives rather than takes. ...

Thanks Triona! I was dying to get some feedback! :) I don't have as much time as I'd like to contribute to writing... but I am likin YWS so far!

Hi I think you could work on using better grammar/English... But I have to say that your repetition of key words helps in keeping with your central theme -Amice (it's ...