Published October 25, 2005
Well today was a rainy day
Today
The sky was gray
The thunder came.
The lighting struck again and again
And it rained and rained and rained.
Just this rain
Falling from the sky
No green grass
No bright light
Just clouds today, there ain’t no stars tonight
I just sat and stared all day
At the gray, the rainy day, today.
Well I woke up slow and soft
To my radio alarm clock
It was a dismal tune
It matched the mood in my bedroom
And as I struggled out of sleep
And to my window just to see
The rain was pounding back
The rainy days, the saddest days are black.
Well I stumbled through my day
In that slow and rainy way
And I rode my bike real slow
The wind was blowing, the sun refused to show
There was no color in my day:
The colors had all washed away
Today was the rainiest day
The blackest day, the saddest day, today.
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Em, his grammer and English is okay, I don't see anyhting wrong.
Good work, zackrouda, the details are wonderful and I really like this poem.
Keep up the good work!
Hi
I think you could work on using better grammar/English...
But I have to say that your repetition of key words helps in keeping with your central theme
-Amice
(it's uh-meese)
(not uh-meechie)
(or uh-mice like mouses)
MKay
=)