Amberchelli

I like this poem, I think if you made it longer and really got into the imagery of it, then it would become just a little bit better. You have ...

I feel like this is more about a relationship that ran its course until it was a mutual departure? I don't know if i'm correct. As for the reference to ...

Wow, this was amazing, at first i thought it was about bullying from the bully perspective? but now i'm not so sure. this piece is pretty sound and it conveys ...

so this was a very interesting piece, i think what would of given it more depth was if we knew what it was that was "controlling" whether it was a ...

This is pretty funny :) you allow this sense of family while adding the intertwining of brotherly bickering to give it some realism :) i would add some more description ...

Hello there, so at first i was thinking this was a reflective piece maybe about how a girl looks in the mirror, how she feels? and i was going to ...

Wow, i have a special connection with this, my boyfriend went to basic training for a summer and when he came back, he wasn't the same, i especially like the ...

AWE :) this is cute, i agree with the other comments it is a bit generic, i think if you add a little of your own voice you could make ...

wow. i really like this, it seems like there is someone you wish would just say how they truly feel? or how you think they feel? I like the imagery ...

I really like your poem, it sends this inexplicable message, i do however believe you need to go through and seperate a little bit, or else it seems like a ...

WOW. so… i was going to post a poem and I saw this, this is amazing. You need to keep writing because this is like you went inside my mind ...

Wow, I really like this, I do however think you could make it a big longer, maybe explain why she doesn't love him anymore, or explain what made her love ...

At first, I thought this was showing the diversity from when the girl was a baby or little girl, to the women she is now…I don't understand what the song ...

Oh that's adorable, we've all done that. Should have picked the lock :)

So i'm going to go with the obvious and say this is more than a heartbreak? Maybe one of those curl-up-in a ball-blast music -don't- bother -me kind of memories? ...