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Re: for you
So hi, I adore this. While I do have to say I have a problem with the caps, or therefore lack of, I must also mention it doesn't matter to ...
Dec 6, 2011 -
Re: The Black and White Dancer
Dearest inkwell, Here goes nothing. I personally believe you got a teensy bit off-topic, or so it seemed. This was okay. I personally love your work, but this seemed almost ...
Dec 6, 2011 -
Re: Vimini
Hey, Well, good evening. I have to say I like your style. I picked a fabulous time to read this, because at this time I was listening to Slipped Away ...
Nov 22, 2011 -
Re: Cuts.
Bonsoir, While this is very righ and classic, it makes too little of sense at times. At times you should have been more clear. Personally{sp?}, I like the fact that ...
Nov 7, 2011 -
Re: The Boy Named Suffering
Hello, First things first, I love all of the poem, honestly. I just have one issue and that's the last line. It BOMBS your poem. It's like, 'I'm so pretty ...
Nov 1, 2011 -
Re: Camping Trip to Death.
Howdy, Soooo many mistakes. I mean all over the place. It was little hard to follow, and at times a bit immature. Don't put "'do it'" put sex. Sex. Not ...
Oct 27, 2011 -
Re: Forever Broken
Howdy, First off, I didn't finish this. It was WAY too all over the placce. It felt so forced and scattered, panicked. I guess maybe that was the feel you ...
Oct 24, 2011 -
Re: Alone
Howdy, To make this thing perfect, you need to make a gigantic change. THE ENDING. This ending, in a blunt choice of words, stinks. Your poem was so powerful, so ...
Oct 4, 2011 -
Re: The Reason for Rain: Chapter Two
Bonsoir, I felt the character's distress when her mom left for her flight. My mom went on a long vacation and never called. As mentioned in an earlier review, I ...
Oct 4, 2011 -
Re: Molly McCoys
Hi, Haha, nice! One thing: Molly McCoys swore off all other boys at the reasonable age of 24. She forced a small smile as she walked down the aisle and ...
Jul 4, 2011 -
Re: You Found Me
Hi, While I am my agnostic little self, I really liked this. You did amazing. A few things, though: But I was floating on the air. Though the funny feeling ...
Jul 4, 2011 -
Re: The Yellow Sheets
Hi, Good job! Though, I do have to say, I don't really like the first paragraph. It wasn't very strong to me. The last line, also, didn't do much for ...
Jul 4, 2011 -
Re: Heartbroken
Hi, You could almost see this situation. You did a phenominal. One thing, though: Hugs were just hugs, smiles were just smiles, and hellos were just hellos. Neither one meant ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Remembering Emily chapter 4 part 2
Hi, AHHHHH! Nu-uh!!! He remembered her! :D Eeeek! I'm not even the romantic type and this made me keep reading as if it would save my life! Oh my goodness! ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Imaginary: Part 3
Hi, OH MY GOODNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYY! And aww. That's sad. How disappointing for her! It makes a story, though! One nitpick: I cut him off with by pu
Jul 1, 2011