AliceFairfield

An allegory of guilt and forgiveness...This is an amazing story. The only thing I want to point out are the second and third sentences. I don't think Athoria needs to ...

This is cute! A really sweet variation of the original poem~ The rhyming structure is pretty interesting too.

Very blunt. I know.

The structure of this poem is great. And the speaker's grief and pain are conveyed well. No mistakes. Fit for publishing.

I'm getting visions of two criminal pals doing crazy things like crazy people together...And they're expecting the other to follow along with them always.

My reviews tend to be short. Since the other reviewers usually cover everything else to say.^^ Sorry about the brevity.

I was told my story feels more like anime than an actual novel. Which is what I'm aiming for, but I'm not sure if this site accepts such styles....

I noticed the name change^^ Mae and Lux and great names. I really like your writing style. It's fairly easy to follow, and the scenes play themselves out smoothly, which ...

This is a powerful work^^ Please do write more.

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I love the world's natural beauty and mystery described in this poem. The minute humanity thinks there's nothing more to discover about the earth, another phenomenon occurs. And then we're ...

I love the world's natural beauty and mystery described in this poem. The minute humanity thinks there's nothing more to discover about the earth, another phenomenon occurs. And then we're ...

What an action packed 1st chapter

Yes, but adopted children are just as much as the creation of their parents as biological children. This is just my opinion, however. I enjoyed reading this poem very much.

This is a great poem on friendship, whether it stays or leaves. It helped me rethink some of my own relationships with others. Indeed, even if a friend leaves, their ...