Alice

Flashfic right? Well, make it a real story. I want to read the whole thing!

I'm not good at critiquing lyrics unless I have the music, so I wouldn't have left a comment if this didn't sound like me and my school. Sad but true. ...

Thanks for the help so far, I'm trying to find a way to get this published in Readers Digest! Wouldn't that be awesome? MM I hope I did a little ...

Thats all there is, its a short story, a very short story at that, but thats all there is.

Wow, well to be frank, I'm not all that proud of this poem, I'm not very good at poetry, but can't find a thing thats like poetry but not quite, ...

I fixed the gramitical errors, and i'm still trying to figure out how to make it a little more interesting.

I eidited this i hope its better :D.

I added a little bit, is it any better?

I re-wrote their convo, it should make a little more sense now. :D

You made a mistake when you went and saw that movie Gen, you should never go into a movie theater and expect a movie to do the book any justice. ...

Oh yeah when and if you read chapter two (which I'll be posting later) it will be from the girls point of view.

Thank you Claud

Thanks peps, but could somebody move it to Fantasy fiction? I've got chapter two but thats fantasy fiction and I'd like to have these in the same fourm.

Alright I like decided on the offical plot to this so could somebody who can do that move it to Fantasy fiction please?

Oh jebus, thanks Dynamo I totally forgot to do that!!! *rushes to edit*