Aley

Yo. I don't know if you did the lines on purpose or not, but there are good and bad things about it. Personally I think you might get yourself into ...

Hello~ I'd like to say that this poem could use some refining. The imagery is there, the language is there, the interpretations are there, but the poem has too much. ...

Hello, Aley here. I think this poem has some potential. You're talking about an issue that a lot of people deal with in their lives, regardless of the heartbreak. A ...

Hello, Aley here to review. First of all I'd like to say I love villanelles as well. I think that there's a certain knack you have to have to write ...

Hey Ella~ First of all I'd like to say that I agree with this message. It's a very powerful idea and important for people to know. We have a right ...

I think you've got something to go on here, but you're cutting it short. Get into it. What is your character feeling, thinking, experiencing. What gives them the strength to ...

Hey Green You should consider working more with the idea that the tears aren't strength. You seem to have multiple ideas in this poem that are all colliding into one. ...

Hey, a quick review here for you. I'll keep this brief and to the point. I think you have a solid understanding of vocabulary, and the uses of certain voices ...

Cleaning Crew Here The ship landed in the Padt City, in the only city with landing strips on Quirni. repetition of In is unnecessary: "The ship landed in the Padt ...

I am listening to music so when I read this, I sort of adapted it to music and I like it. I think you've got a great start for a ...

Hi! I'm typically a poetry reviewer, so forgive my ineptitude if you spot it. First I'd like to say that I enjoy the voice of your narrator, but at the ...

Hey Deanie~ First off I'd like to just make a quick comment on spoken poetry v.s. poetry. It's not really to say much about what you did, but just a ...

Hello~ This poem shows a good understanding of rhyme. Most of the rhymes are constructed so they're rather flat. At the same time, it's a poem that would probably be ...

Hello, I have a few things I can point out to you that I think will help improve your poem. Overall I think you've got the start of something you ...

HELLO STRANGER WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN?! Send me a line more frequently. I think this poem explores interesting boundaries with space and face. For me, I don't think it was ...