The Militia Boys

Hey there! Hadj here for review day!
Nice poem, it captures a lot of nationalism

A few nitpicks:

"These thought in their minds ring"
Should be either "This thought" or "These thoughts"

"Into eyes that saw it no
The sun a golden light wrought "
This is really confusing, I have no idea what you were trying to say.

Other than that, great work, and good use of a rhyme scheme
There isn't a lot of historical poetry out there, so this poem is truly unique
Good luck and keep writing!
~Hadj

Amazingly talented poem. (Or you're talented).
Anyways, just a few grammar issues.
i.e.: "From their eyes, the battle-light shone."
"The sun, a golden light wrought"
"These thought in their mind's ring." - Unless you wanted mind to be plural.
I did, however, get confused at the last stanza on the first two lines.
"Their thoughts are on one thing," All right.
"These thought in their minds ring."
Confusion alert! The thoughts thought? Perhaps you meant they?
Last line seemed a bit forced, as it breaks the original flow of the poem, but perhaps you can use that as some kind of symbolism. Free from stanza rules, I like it.

The line where it says "Into eyes that saw it no" is supposed to read "Into eyes that saw it not."
Just thought I would clarify.

Hello~

This poem shows a good understanding of rhyme. Most of the rhymes are constructed so they're rather flat. At the same time, it's a poem that would probably be explaining the Revolutionary War and if you weren't aware of what was going on with it, then you're probably rather young, so the forced rhymes won't sound forced to them. The more I read, the more I see rhymes like this, so it's really nothing to worry too much about.

There is, however, a better way to go about rhyming if you're someone who can't write poems without them. I'll be checking out this other poem of yours "The Sun" after this one to see where you stand. The other method is like this:

[quote]----- -- -- --- a
a --- ------- a ---- -- b ----
---- ---- b ----- ------- a ----[quote]
Basically it is internal rhyme. You don't have to worry about breaking up stanzas as much as long as you don't put multiple/all of the words that rhyme at the end. This still pleases the ear, but the reader doesn't start reading to see what word that rhymes with "thing" you're going to use. Also sometimes the reader won't even notice the rhyme, just like the rhythm, or the tone of the poem.

So, I suppose, regardless of when you wrote this, it is important to also note the other literary devices for poetry, like imagery, personification, metaphor, and so forth. For me, this poem is lacking in creativity on that side of things. The reason I say this is the repetitive use of most of these words. You use the words back to back like you're trying to revise the sentence, or create a beat with them, but that can be established by words of the same syllable length. Perhaps now that you're a bit older, you can find other words to use for "called" "thought" "light" and "free."

Lastly I'll say that this poem doesn't have much emotion to it, which probably comes with the age. At that age the poems we are exposed to are more nursery rhymes intended for children to learn something about what's going on in the world, and there is a market for that, so it is up to you if it is good or bad. There are multiple types of poetry. Look at "The Cremation of Sam McGee" by Service against "Poetry Is a Sickness" by Lee, you can see the wide variety of styles. It's up to you what you want to strive for.