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Hey Eros, I have a few things I'd like to start with, so let's get right into it. First off, I think your dialogue is really good. You've got a ...

Hey GreatKing, So, Welcome to Review day where you get multiple reviews on things like that in ways that you might not always want to have happen. I didn't read ...

Hey Suryavegeta12 (Vegeta like DBZ?) I get the sense that you're really working towards being a poet here. Actually, I confess I saw one of your reviews where you were ...

Hey Mahvash, I really like how well you're using language to create your point. You have a really nice flow in this piece and despite being a little predictable for ...

Hi Audrey147, So first of all I'd like to say that as this is, it's a really long read. You probably won't get any more reviews on it because of ...

Hey FeatherPen, I'm here to review your poem because I can. First off, I'd like to say props for tackling a unique an different way to approach writing a poem. ...

Hey! Okay. I really like how your writing turned out in this. I hope to see you continue writing fanfiction, or fiction, or whatever. I think if you did a ...

Okay, so again, good writing, but this time I have a comment. Ellipsis (...) really is not something I like to see in writing. I'll explain why. In the traiditonal ...

Okay, so, hm. I like this chapter. The reason I like this chapter is because you craft a sense of tension, relief, and more tension together. You leave us on ...

Alright, I like how you wrote this chapter. It's a good chapter. I don't like how this chapter is placed in the stories overall plot. We are in a very ...

I think a better intermediary chapter would have been the one where Gus was killed. I feel like just reading this section, I'm really missing that part of the story ...

Yo! This is the second chapter of this I'm reviewing. Personally, I don't like the way that this skips from past to present with this chapter. I'm guessing you're doing ...

Okie dokie! Hello SongMorning! To jump into the review I basically have a couple things I'd like to point out about writing which I think your style is good for ...

Hey Laelle! I found this in the Green Room so here's a review from me to you! I think you made your point exceptionally clear in this piece. You weren't ...

Hello! Overall I feel like the review of the artwork is based in the right place. There are a couple things that are missing, however, to really make it sparkle. ...