Aedomir

Like I think I said before, you are great at anything you write. This is the end? Oh well, at least we now know you can write Romance! =P I ...

First of all, I'm Mark. I notice you have sbmitted work the same amount as you have reviews. Please could you keep to a 2:1 ratio please! OK, on to ...

Hiya! Just a quick point - be sure to capitalise all 'I's and the first letters of lines. that was washed only to dirty the water. I liked this bit, ...

Hiya! Mind if I take a peek? I thought not... I disagree with Artecila, I thought the idablogue was very well done. It flowed nicely and I think your style ...

I am new to poetry myself, but I will give what advice I can. but didn’t stop the rain. I don't understand this bit. It doesn't really make a lot ...

I have read your first, I just thought I would put the crit here: General Impressions Loved it. There's no other way of putting it, just that I loved it. ...

Hiya! A story that lies beneath my heart, of him and a embarrass. The last bit didn't make sense, I liked that ine aside frm the fact it was horribly ...

Hiya! Aly mimicked Auntie Clair, “Just do what I say!” I think that dialogue shoild be itaclized. I really liked that chapter! Nice and quick, fast-paced and kept me interested. ...

I think I reviewed this in the od post with this up. Like I said, this is great and the storyline is very original. I think it is a great ...

Hiya! Nice to read some of your work, and don't worry, anything posted on here is copyrighted to the author, because it is backed up with the time it was ...

Let me first say how I will only be saying my opinion as the grammar sees to have been more or less done. I thought this was a excellent followup ...

Hiya! five ours away five h ours away I spent most of the say at the train station or on the train. 'I spend most of the day at the ...

I agree wuth penguin. This was very good, but it just didn't flow well enoguh for me: 'He likes when she is flushed from the shower' I jsut didn't undersatnd ...

Great! Be sure to put capitals however: 'Wine glass on the kitchen table, Ninety percent empty. pills - three white,

Hiya! Sorry I only have time for a short crit, so no grammar, but here goes: The characters are great. I think the development is spot on, no worries there, ...