Aedomir

Heya girlie! Just a couple of things before I review this: Please make sure you do at least two reviews before submitting anything, that way, you will get more people ...

Hey! I loved this, a very sweet poem. No matter what they say I reckon either a period or comma at the end here. Fighting the urge to fall. I ...

Thise was very nice. Aside from the comma mistake ashleylee pointed out, I found one mistake: girls head. Posessive--apostrophe :wink: I will echo what others said, it is very short ...

Wow! I really enjoyed that! I love to read poetry, but when it comes to reviewing it, I leave a lot to be desired. So, let's have a look! I ...

‘Run ! Why the space? ‘Shit!’ Mark cursed, The dialogue is unnecessary, just say that he cursed (Hehe, Mark's my name!) come on’ comma after 'on' :wink: for the sake ...

Firstly, grammar. That entire first stanza is one sentence, and the second doesn't even have a full stop. Also, it only needs a capital letter if it is at the ...

I really enjoyed that! I loved all the negatives you used, but it bothers me how you used 'dead/death' so much along with 'bloody' and 'kill'. The theme was nice ...

Hehe! You know, as random as this is, I will actually give a proper crit. Mathas stops walking. He has seen something Change in tense, ther a few more too. ...

I will echo what Kenpachi said. I don't see any similies here. Also, yes the topic is a very hard one to do, because it is done so often. Don't ...

Hi, long time no see! First thing I will say is to use capital letters at the start of each sentence, as with prose as with poetry. this thing you ...

I would agree with niteowl here. Love is both a common and difficult thing to write about, and I would recommend that you read a few more first. I think ...

Sheesh Jared, how many stories have you got going now?! Hehe, let's have a look; how powerful is Verdine any[s]who[/s] ? 'Anyway'? His tattered rags [s]that[/s] were loaned to him[s] ...

I know of Naruto, but nothing else. :? Anyhow, let's have a look. Momo could do nothing but watch the steel blade pierce her stomach and slowly begin to slice ...

Wow! I loved that! The imagery was great, and I remain unsure what it symbolizes (which I am sure it does) but it is great, because it makes me think ...

I said I would get to it! Tell me where to go after this... me confused :? first thing you noticed. This doesn't fit, I would stick to 3rd person ...