Aedomir

Hi again! I said I would check it out, so here I am! That's great! I also liked the bit E picked out, so I won't repeat it. 'The woman ...

I've never read that, but as soon as I finish the Eagle's Conquest and LotR TTT its how to kill a mocking birf for me! Be it the shut-in Boo ...

I HATE Paolini. He's vain, thinks he is better than Tolkien and a complet copier of him. I really hate him. I bought Eragon, read the first chapter and put ...

Heya! Lets have a look shall we? 'her eyelids rise, and this time, she spots me' Don't take my word on this, but do you think 'but' would work better ...

Ye, that was VERY confusing, but I don't dislike it. I'm not really a poem guy, but I liked this. Not much to say really! Keep Writing! ~D'Aedomir~ :-D

I don't dislike it, it jsut feels as though a million words are cramped together, adn that you used a theasrus for every other word lol! :-D Make sure you ...

You know, when I read this, I jstu tell you are a poet. It has that... you know, present tense, wonderful imagery, that sort of thing. I really don't know ...

Wow! That was a good followup! Not much to say really, I though it was really good! It offered a nice little explanation to why he just ranomdly killed that ...

Hiya! First can I say welcomes to YWS! I hope you will enjoy this place as much as me! Now, lets see what we have here shall we? 'Then one ...

Hello there! Let's have a look now shall we? 'Tor was the first to attack the girl, his defensive attitude taking over.' If you were defensive, wouldn't you defend, not ...

Wow I liked this! You managed to make a stroy into a poem! Very creepy! :-D 'No! He won’t. He can’t. He does.' OOOO! I liked this bit! This is ...

Firstly, can I jsut say welcome to YWS! And please could you read the rules, we do ask that you do at least two reviews before submitting anything. No worries ...

Woah Squallz, leave some fun for the rest of us :-D I won't dwell on grammar, I;m not really the person for it plus it has been more or less ...

hiya! lets have a look what we have here :-): 'rip the stone floor open' Do you rip stone? break, scratch? 'front of hers, his blood red eyes meeting hers.' ...

Uou lost me, but that's not to say I didn't like it. It was very intriguing. I don’t want to hate her, I don’t even love her…. I don’t like ...