AdoxagraphyAngelus

Micki dear! I'm here to review your story in return for reviewing my story. ;P (I love ya!) “Not everything is fun and games, you know,” Kailee repeated to me ...

Nice job. :) One thing, though, and I'll point it out in some of the lines. You say you won't leave, You will. You say life is a game that ...

Hello. :) Onto the nit-picks. :) A sincere and tender kiss- you planted on my cheek, It made my bones feel soft and weak and swole ( Swole? That's not ...

Nice job! Interesting poem. :D But I'm not sure about the way you broke off the lines. It's interesting for sure, but it didn't really give to the poem. Simply ...

Over-all, I really did enjoy this poem, and I have very few nit-picks for it. :) I can't hack this water straight off my back, (This sounds kind of...Awkward, for ...

This was really well written. You conveyed the emotion very well. Please, young man, Not my daughter. I see the mischief in your eyes, This line is.... Amazing. And I ...

That was pretty good. I got what you were saying, but it kind of lacked some emotion. Though, I feel like it's nearly perfect without the emotion for some reason. ...

You wrote this well. :) It makes sense, and you got your meaning across, but still left some room for the reader to wonder if the other person just left, ...

That was really good. Like, really, really good. It sounds to me like its about someone committing suicide. I can't even find any nitpicks. You wrote this really, really well. ...

Hey, Micki-More. :) So, I really enjoyed reading this chapter. You know I love all of your writing. I do have a few suggestions, though. One thing I'd like you ...

So... I can't believe I haven't reviewed this yet. XP But I did PM you about it, so, I guess that's okay... But since you already know my thoughts on ...

I can't leave a long review, unfortunately, because I'm not on my laptop, and my dad's pestering me to get off. XP Anyways, that was lovely, as always, Bekah.The words ...

That was extremely sweet, and well written. :) Your angelic, soft hair, and your shimmering brown eyes. Your sweet voice, flowing in the air, was what made me realize; There's ...

This was fairly good. I can catch the emotion you were going for. I would suggest adding some commas, though, or else it sounds a bit choppy. So I can't ...

Okay, my first thoughts on this story are: All together, fairly good. I rather enjoyed reading it, but where you cut it off left me wondering what happened to Lucy ...