Adnamarine

Just gonna do a line-by-line. I didn't read the reviews above me, so apologies in advance if I repeat advice of theirs. These eyes of mine can see, The comma's ...

This didn't sound to me like you were talking about accepting people as they are. I take it that's a good thing? =) I really don't have a lot to ...

Hey Krupp Unlike Max (October Girl), I do see how this is like a cafe. The only line which would make me think otherwise is "I’m frozen, they’re moving faster ...

This has promise, that much I have to say. You're sort of teetering on the edge of falling into the cliche. Hopefully I can help you find a sturdier spot. ...

Light, original verse; how refreshing. I especially like the first two stanzas, though there are some suggestions I'd like to make, naturally. I miss his croaking, I miss his wet ...

I happen to like dark poetry; it's not often that I come across it. Choosing a rarer form certainly helps ensure you're originality. You did a good job bringing out ...

I don’t like to write reviews where I’m not actually critiquing the poem; it makes me feel guilty. But where your poem is concerned, Pen, I just had to say ...

I've told you this before (at least I hope I have), and I'll say it again, you're poetry is always worth the read. :) This is one of your best. ...

Hey Jon! Just wanted to return the favor (finally :P), so here I go. The first thing I noticed was that in the title was that you have a plural ...

I have to admit, I did like the first one better, at least from the standpoint that it was far easier to "perceive" however I wanted to. At the same ...

See them, there, in that open expance. It's actually "expanse." :) Most of what I have to suggest has to do with the rhythm. Something I always try to do, ...

And crisp 600 thread count sheets. It should be “thread-count”. I’m from the rusting sputters. (Out of a car going Putt, Putt in the frigid winter air.) The period should ...

Hey hon, what's up. Where shall we start? Let's start with your own admission: that this is sappy. If you know it's sappy, there are some really important questions you ...

Based on the title of the poem, I was pleasantly surprised. This wasn't at all what I expected. It's creative, and original. That said, let's move on to the important ...

This is one of those rare poems where I have practically no changes to recommend. And the ones I have amount to nothing, really. Oh, others might come along and ...