Adnamarine

Jonny! I love the title. This is definitely one of those cases where the title is as much a part of the poem as any of the rest of it, ...

What I immediately noticed as I was reading this, is that it's contradictory. Is having free will as good as we think, Or is it only to help us sink? ...

First what I would suggest is getting rid of your rhyme scheme. It's very difficult to use the best words and rhyme at the same time, which means that you ...

Interesting subject. It's tough when you're using the mind of a child as your point of view when your thoughts sound much older than there's would. I don't think there's ...

Hi Eve! I have to start out by agreeing with Hope and Lydia. I think it would be an improvement if you got rid of the rhyming in this poem. ...

I found myself unable to focus at all while I was reading this. The problem, as I see it, is that in every single line you're jumping to something completely ...

Nice job with the rhyme scheme; it goes along well with this poem. Some of the lines were a little choppy, but it's nothing that can't be easily fixed! Here's ...

Like Eddie said, I like the sentiment. Any writer can relate to the beginning of this piece in one way or another. Now, personally I don't want to say there's ...

Hawkie! I had to come review this when you told me you were posting =D This might be just my personal preference, but I'm not the very biggest fan of ...

Jon! So, I'm going to mend my cheating ways and write you a proper review. =D As much as I've been trying to focus more on content in my reviews, ...

Hi Navi! I can definitely see Whitman's influence in this piece. I have to admit he's not a favourite poet of mine, but that's not to say that will have ...

Hi Laura! I can relate so well to this piece it's almost like I wrote it myself. You have no idea what to write, so you start writing about not ...

Expo dear, here I am, to give you my first review in ages! Aaah, I remember back when you were just a newb, and now *sniffs* my little poet is ...

This is niice Expo, very nice. The first thing I noticed is that the lines seemed to me to divide themselves into groups of two; it made me wonder if ...

Here as promised! Sorry about the delay. First of all, I like your rhyme scheme; and that's pretty rare for me, so good job =) I think it gave this ...