Adnamarine

Ooohh, yoyo. Tsk tsk. First line = lovely! Me likey, Timea!!! (I'm in a weird mood.) I especially like the first part and the last. The middle was slightly strange ...

Very clever:) I especially like these lines: "Suddenly, a black-eyed Susan appears from the back The gaze of a birch catches her eye, and she flutters off, But not before ...

A cloud of sickness , spread far and thin— The result of man ambition to build, and master . I suppose you could leave the exclamation point there, but personally, ...

As niteowl said, short and sweet:) It's very effective, no useless fluff in there. I wonder if there's room to make it longer, though? Just a thought. Nothing wrong with ...

We're friends . We talk, We laugh. You touch me lightly on the arm, I wonder what this means. You changed tenses Your smile is enough to make my heart ...

And many came to glimpse the fall and the horror spread through one and all their eyes were covered so they'd not see the pain that visited them that day ...

I think you need to expand on this. I definitely agree. Your take on the subject matter is unique, but you should make it longer. I'd expand on the description ...

Revenge awaits us all someday, r evenge can pass the time away . The first two lines seem rather unrelated. Sneaking, plotting s cheming, stalling, f or the most wonderful ...

Yeah, I could kind of tell that it was difficult for you not to rhyme. But it didn't effect the quality of the poem at all:) The wind dies down ...

Oh, I like this very much:) I have to say, I agree with Matt Bellamy about her favorite stanza:) I'm not sure why... *shrugs* I almost think it wouldn't hurt ...

Ouch. Where you paying any attention to basic grammar and punctuation when you wrote this? Sorry. anger, hate, shame, lies. all his loyalty he denies. The rhyming here is doing ...

I have to say, having those extra words capitalized is distracting. And you have no punctuation in this; it desperately needs punctuation. You need more imagery in this. I like ...

I didn't get this poem at all... I didn't get what it was about, what the emotion was supposed to be, or anything. I can't say that I got anything ...

Through million doors Make this 'through a million doors' or 'through millions of doors' I felt my hand touch yours. Beyond grand mountains and cold lakes , a s fast ...

This was interesting and original. Mostly I'd just go over the punctuation and grammatical stuff. You misspelled 'deceive'. But I didn't really get it, I have to admit. Much as ...