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Re: Teddy Bear's Story
:elephant: :smt026 :smt044 YAYS FOR GAYS AND CHEERS FOR QUEERS!!!!! :smt044 :smt026 :elephant: lol I re-read your piece, and i'm still enchanted by it. You're so bold to go into ...
May 20, 2009 -
Re: Looking Glass Prologue
Hellu!! I noticed that you are an Ameirican Mcgee's Alice fan. Me too! I LOVE your alice siggy, too. Tell me what u think about my siggy! Ok, first of ...
Sep 30, 2008 -
Re: Awakening
Alrighty, i hate gramar checks, leaves a biter taste on my tongue, so i'm just going to skip that. My favorite thing to do is ideas, so i'm going to ...
Sep 30, 2008 -
Re: Astray (2)
Talmon needs to get a haircut!! lol i really like this alot, and ameilia is cool!! Just a suggestion: try not to say lost all the time! maybe instead of ...
Jun 26, 2008 -
Re: Magic's Curse
Hey! this was really well writen, but i have a few suggestions. I would say that your story needs much more describing of the enviorment and of emotions. the first ...
Jun 25, 2008 -
Re: Astray (1)
Hey!! this is acctually really good!! its a wee bit long, so you should try spliting it up in chapters. i really like how you made her had a really ...
Jun 25, 2008 -
Re: My Prologue
LOL hmmmm this is extremely confuseing :smt017 . And why do i get the vauge sense of deja-vu? :smt112 This oddly feels like zelda! hmmmmm i wonder why?? naughty naughty!*wags ...
Apr 27, 2008 -
Re: Chapter 1
HI LIZA MONSTER lol ok about your desriptions, well, i kno u like anime, but u need to write how the look too. This felt very rushed and confuseing. you ...
Apr 27, 2008 -
Re: Excerpts from my comedy-fantasy story
LOL tht was cute!!!! LOL bugger off tee-hee. i LOVE tht!!!!! ur funny! :smt046 :smt082
Apr 16, 2008 -
Re: Land of Sky, Land of Rain (Chapter One)
GOSH!!! hun, make it WAY shorter!!! even i, who read a 289 pg book in one day was scared of reading tht!!!! cut it up!!! Otherwise, gj!! :lol: :smt064
Apr 16, 2008 -
Re: Icy Paths - Prologue
very sketchy, but sounds alot like an idea i had once! She ran, leaping over corpses, her feet almost always splashing into pools of blood. try cutting out almost allways ...
Apr 12, 2008 -
Re: Moonlight
I really liked it, and ur right, it is really short. Try to avoid saying mate too many times, or using tongues too much. and there is usually only one ...
Apr 12, 2008 -
Re: The Eclipse Chronicles
Ok just wanted to point out that there is already a book published By stephenie meyer called eclipse: lol it was ok its a lilshort to be a first chapter ...
Apr 4, 2008 -
Re: The Chronicles of Syn: Sins of the Flame
Absoulutely beautfuly writen. I'm not sure about spelling, but the way you worded it sounded great. It flowed beautfully!!! I'm jealous!! i wish tht i could write like you can!!! ...
Mar 28, 2008 -
Re: The Person Watching Me*Edited 2/20/08*
LOL I thought tht was great!! u and my freind kirsten would rlly get along!! :smt026 :smt026 :smt026 :smt023
Mar 26, 2008