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Hi Laurelin3! Welcome to the magical world of the Young Writers' Society. I love this poem! It flows smoothly and falls off the tongue, and you didn't seem restricted by ...

Hey Romance Otaku! I think Inkwell pretty much summed it up. I really like this poem, and I must admit that I look at homeroom that very way, sometimes. I ...

Hi Kat Jackson! I'll be reviewing your poem here today. First things first, you don't need the comma in the second stanza. Not only will it flow better, but it ...

Hi Channon! I love the concept of this poem, but the first thing I noticed about it is that you are restricted by your rhyme scheme. In fact, you are ...

Hi AtticusGallows! If I haven't said this already, welcome to YWS. I won't go into great detail right now, as time isn't exactly on my side, but the main thing ...

Hi Watermelonspots. Welcome to YWS! I hope you get some good reviews here, as well as do a bit of reviewing, yourself. I really like this poem. It's short and ...

Hi OhSoSqueamish! I'll go through and edit some things in red, first. It was the silence that scared him more than anything. Just five minutes ago they had been running ...

Hi Ilyaeelz. I think I'll edit the punctuation a bit, because it doesn't exactly flow right with the comma positioning you used. The warmth, as of a hearth (song)? The ...

Hi Way2Dawn! Snoink just about covered it. I'll just go through and edit a few things. So sad to see that today , true art, music, literature, and culture are ...

Hi SoulRider! Welcome to the Young Writers' Society! I hope you will get some good reviews here, as well as do a bit of reviewing, yourself. Wish to see you ...

Hi LittlePetRock! How cute! This is a very sweet little ... um ... uh ... article thingy. But I think that if this lacks anything, it's a purpose. Is it ...

I am ecstatic! I love Michael Jackson! You should see my bedroom wall and all the Michael posters I have! He was the best. Fashion and taste changed as though ...

Hi Theotherone! Welcome to the Young Writers' Society! I hope you'll get some good reviews here, and I can see you've already started reviewing, yourself! Nice work! I like this ...

Whoa. This was amazing. I mean, jaw-dropping. I think the main problem with this poem is formatting. You had me pausing at weird intervals. Here's an idea: raw limbed and ...

Hi TheNewHero! I like this, and I'm sure everyone here on YWS can sympathise. I agree with BenFranks; you have commas everywhere. I'm going to have to be blunt, though; ...