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  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic
    Re: Forgotten Memories

    Hey, Redrum here for a quick review. First of all, I want to say that I love the concept you've created with the two columns and then ending it with ...

    Dec 12, 2015

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: The Legions of Paper Dolls

    I give you a standing ovation for this poem. Everywhere you go, people are always comparing life to this and that using pointless metaphors to help imprint their ideas on ...

    Jan 16, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Sleepless Night

    Hey, Supernb! Redrum here to give a review. First I would like to start by saying you have a great idea here. You gave a good description which helped set ...

    Jan 16, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: [Post Deleted]

    Okay, first of all, I want to say that this had to be one of the best poems I've ever read. It was truely phenominal. You have real talent, and ...

    Dec 4, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: The Doppelganger

    First of all, I'd like to just say wow. This was incredible. Absolutely amazing. The imagry just blew me away. Quote: His hair, a dark and devilish plumage, swayed like ...

    Nov 2, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Sic Semper Tyrannis

    I love this poem! I definitely think you should post it on a sign or banner and use it as a protest. I don't recall any grammar errors, and it ...

    Oct 1, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Tie me up and love me

    First of all, I have to say I love the rhyme scheme here. I know from experience that it's a difficult one to follow through a whole poem. Quote: Let ...

    Oct 1, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: No Ordinary Girl

    Il ike the concept you have here, but I think it needs a little work. Before I go all Grammar Nazi and stuff and ramble on until you want to ...

    Aug 25, 2011

  • Lyrics » General, General
    Re: Missing You

    I have to agree with Jaetwee. The rhyming was very off. Like, you were constantly rhyming one sound, and only a few stanzas had rhyme scheme going, which makes the ...

    Aug 18, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Blank pages

    I loved this poem! It was short, sweet and simple, as well as to the point. I've never really liked the long, elaborate poems. The only thing I would change ...

    Aug 18, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: The Way Out

    Hey there! Great poem, just so you know. I couldn't find any corrections to make (I'm guessing Noelle found them all lol!) I can't put my finger on what I ...

    Aug 12, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Hell's Rollercoaster

    Um, can anybody say "EPIC!" This poem was hysterical in a creepy kind of way. I know I chuckled more than once. Haha, "Please don't mind the Hitler 'stache" That ...

    Aug 11, 2011

  • Lyrics » General, General
    Re: Mid-Love Crisis

    Not bad. Not bad at all. I couldn't find any grammar errors (I'm a grammar Nazi, sorry xD). All in all, it was a beautiful song that got the point ...

    Aug 1, 2011

  • Lyrics » General, General
    Re: Words Take Me

    I have to agree with Maimoona. The first line makes no sense. These two lines don't make much sense either: Words take me bleeding out the wound Words take me ...

    Aug 1, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Living in Sorrow

    Well that was depressing, but I loved it nonetheless. There was a huge twist in the beginning. At first, I thought this was going to be a love poem, then ...

    Jul 31, 2011


Sometimes my life just sounds like surrealistic fiction being sold on clearance at the book store.
— J. G. Hammersmith