Published October 1, 2011
I'll wear my bandana
and raise my black flag
and remind them of
civilians carried
away in black bags.
Nobody listens
I'm a waste of their time
I wonder if MKULTRA
is still controlling
their minds.
Then there's the problem
with the "second Reichstag,"
you know, the reason
we went into Baghdad.
We have felt the abuses
despotism has arrived
it's what our fathers said
is that so contrived?
I'm done with asking
the fascists' permission
to protest their prisons
it's not their decision.
So if you are one
of the ones who can hear
we must take a stand
the revolution is here.
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I love this poem! I definitely think you should post it on a sign or banner and use it as a protest. I don't recall any grammar errors, and it flowed well for the most part. All in all, a perfect poem that made me smile
Hey there:)
This is one of the first poems with a political view I have seen in a while, and I must say, it's good.
In a way that if someone doesn't agree, the poem is written beautifully. Personally, I loved this part:
For some reason, it reminded me of those early Green Day songs:D
It might be a good idea to split your poem into verses, so they're easier to read and each carries an idea.
Some nitpicking:
Just some punctuation issues, can be fixed in a flash:)
Otherwise, I really liked it, it's written very well, and carries a deep meaning.
Keep it up;)
xx polly