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Yeah I agree this poem has been written a million times before, however I am sure this is where a million other poets start out and there is quite clearly ...

I don't know it was incredibly strange. It reminded me of poetry with a completely off, in some parts rhythm and that wasn't in a good way. I think you ...

Both stanzas on there own were very good but they just didn't seem to fit together as a poem. I think you need to make them flow together a bit ...

I liked the flow and rhythm of the poem. However it was jut in many ways a bit of a teen angst poem. It is possible to write depressing poetry ...

Wow this was brilliant. It flows really nicely and you've really brought your emotions across. It was simple and I am sure something a lot of people can relate to. ...

Well I really liked it. Although some bits seemed a little off. Here is what I would do: [s]thoughts[/s]Thoughts untold [s]are[/s] Lie deep within this mind [s]things[/s]Things that go unsaid ...

Yes I agree, I was getting a little bored by the end. You have some great writing skills, I think you just need to cut it down a bit. There ...

Woah I really liked that (: A couple of bits I would work on: The pain turns to sadness And then it grows to anger This good and true, but ...

Personally I think it is about just having to be taken with the flow of the world and you maybe felt at the time the whole world was just controlling ...

Yall torched that house when I was still in it, You fuckers laughed, yall is on some bullshit. This bit really reminded me of 8 Mile. Was that intentional or ...

It was a little cliche but you clearly have talent for writing because it was really well writing. Poetry and lyrics, I think can often be very similar but I ...

Yes I completely agree about adding some setting and a little more description to bring the character to life. Right now it could be absoutlutely anybody telling this story. Give ...

I was expecting a lot more from this when I read the first two lines however the rest of it was just a whole load of terrible cliche lines. Some ...

When I first read what had inspired you to write this poem I expected it to be written from your point of view looking at your friend not from your ...

Wow I thought that was amazing. It was a brilliantly clever unique idea that you've excequted incredibly well. I am not sure about the bold. Whilst it was a good ...