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“No,” Four interrupts. Her voice is taught. “No.” This is the wrong form of the word. It should be "taut". I liked this... but I'll tell you, it was a ...

This is very potent, very eloquent. *claps* A few things... firstly some technical stuff... Oh, mother, I am weeping Besides your doorway, should be "beside" Lips shaking silence Still I ...

p.s. You need to start refering to "The Bearer" as "Latent Heritage"... you need to get it out of that rut into another one so that it will become it's ...

This is amazing! I am in love with the names... particularly Ready and Distance. I'm pretty sure that when I have children you will be called upon for name suggestions. ...

Seriously, those two lines could be sold to a chocolateer. They are the stuff ads are made of... very lovely and very catchy. This is a cute little poem. The ...

Dusky, you are amazing. I don't know how you do it. But, you somehow manage to take in life and send back out a complex and detailed masterpiece of words ...

I'm not sure it's amusing... but it was poignant. I agree that this isn't amazing as more than a personal piece of writing... simply because I don't think it makes ...

I'm enjoying reading this. I do have a few comments though. Firstly, I don't get how the title works into the story. So far, you have focused on Christmas because ...

This is pretty much amazing! I love the idea behind it... I think it is very true. I don't know if this is killing in war or not, it kinda ...

That's really interesting... of course, I haven't seen "League of Extraordinary Gentlemen" so I have no more of a clue than Reese. But, I love how you pull other stories ...

This is adorable. It made me smile also. A few comments... In the fifth line "lifes" should be "life's". The rhythm of the second line is off. I got a ...

This is an excellent intro to a story. I hope that you post more. You created depth by mixing the past, the present, and the future all together. And, as ...

You're not the only one's who spell hot with two t's... I remember a friend of mine going on a rant about it once... lol This is really amazing. You're ...

Frankly, there are lots of words in there that I don't know the definition of. So, as of yet, I can't really grasp your point. However, I really, really, really ...

This is good. Short, yes. But, there is nothing wrong with working in small pieces. I just have a few comments about structure because there is not yet much in ...