Young Writers Society

NOTICE!!!

I am leaving YWS for a while. Not permanently, but most likely a good chunk of time. Meaning?

I won't be critiquing your stuff.

If you still want one, or I actually owe you one (like Jiggity), then wait a bit and repost when I reopen.

When I do reopen, there will be a list of FIVE critiques. I will NOT go any larger than that, and if you request one when I'm full, I WILL refuse to critique it. I'm not getting over my head again.

Sorry, guys. But I'm not the only critiquer out there - most of you have probably forgotten that I owe you one. So just ask for one on a newer piece in a month or so.

See you later.

~JFW1415

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Why Should I Ask YOU For A Critique?

Because I’m amazing, and you love me. Actually, there are several reasons:

1. I just won Suzanne’s best critique contest. First place.
2. I was the featured member for most of July.
3. I have five stars, and have received the last two in just a month or two.
4. I am on Rieda’s star review list.
5. I am now an Instructor. I was nominated by six people.
6. I was the Instructor of the Month for June.
7. I have over 300 critiques, and I don't think any of them got me less than 50 points.
8. I am a member of SPEW. xD

So, interested?

What Will You Critique?

I am best at action/adventure, romantic, and other. I can do pretty much anything, though – don’t hesitate to ask. (I’m even willing to do advanced critiques, though I take longer for those.)

What Don’t You Critique?

- No graphic sex scenes
- Ask for a critique on chapter ONE, then have me continue. Don't say 'go read chapter 23!'
- Pick something - no 'anything at all!'

How Many Pieces Can I Ask For?

Hundreds.

What Are You Good At Finding?

- Grammar/spelling
- Emotions
- Flow
- Realism (needed for all types of writing, including fantasy.)
- Character development
- Description
- Dialogue.
- General atmosphere.
- Character History (with each other, themselves, etc.)
- Atmosphere (the basic things you notice when you first enter a room, like lighting and occupants.)

Eh… maybe more, but that’s off the top of my head. Ask for something, and I’ll keep an eye out for it.

Examples

-Wrong or Right <-- Winner of Suzanne’s Best Critique contest!
-I Love My Dirt; My Dirt Loves Me <-- My personal favorite!
-~Michelangelo's Night and Day~ Chapter One
-Burnt Memories
-First Kiss
-Freedom Fighters
-Kidnapped, Chapter Two
-In The Night

What’s On Your Agenda For Critiquing?
[As of 8/14/08]

Long Stories

- Scars by niccy_v (Saved on computer, partially done, will be completed in parts)
- Shadow of the Sun Chapter One for Jiggity
- Shadow of the Sun Chapter Two for Jiggity
- Shadow of the Sun Chapter Three for Jiggity
- Shadow of the Sun Chapter Four for Jiggity
- Magda Part One for Jiggity
- Magda Part Two for Jiggity
- Magda Part Three for Jiggity
- Magda Part Four for Jiggity
- Magda Part Five for Jiggity
- Needles and Roses Chapter One (Edited) for KJ
- Needles and Roses Chapter Two (Edited) for KJ
- Needles and Roses Chapter Three (Edited) for KJ
- Needles and Roses Chapter Four (Edited) for KJ
- Needles and Roses Chapter Five (Edited) for KJ
- Needles and Roses Chapter Six (Edited) for KJ
- Needles and Roses Chapter Seven (Edited) for KJ
- Needles and Roses Chapter Eight for KJ
- Chapter One: The Canaby Sisters for wiseman210
- Chapter Two: The Witch Hunter's Town for wiseman210
- Chapter Three: The Witches, The Gifts, And The Staffs for wiseman210
- Chapter Four: The Village with a Mystery for wiseman210
- Chapter Five: Future Meeting, A Power Switch, and A Cold Cave for wiseman210
- Chapter Six: Escaping The Cave In The Past And Future for wiseman210
- Welcome to Miami Chapter One for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Two for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Three for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Four for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Five for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Six for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Seven for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Eight for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Nine for day tripper
- Welcome to Miami Chapter Ten for day tripper
- Murder and Mayhem Part Two for XxxDo
- All of A New Light On A Distant Shot for ambercoultis (Through e-mail)
- The Deep for Conrad Rice (Through e-mail)
- FREAK for Snoink (Make small edits through MSN)

Short Stories

- Mirror, Mirror On The Wall (Edited) for Conrad Rice
- Horus for Conrad Rice

Side Character Contest Prizes

- Six for Sam (When decided)
- Five for Esme (When decided)
- Three for JabberHut (When decided)
- Murder and Investigation Part Three for BigBadBear (When posted)

Grammar Contest Prizes

- Three for chocoholic (When decided)
- Two for Blink (When decided)
- One for Monki (When decided)

Fan-Fiction

- Chapter Six and all proceeding for turayza
- Chapter Two Edit for roxyjana06

Total Left

68

All contest winners: Please contact me when you decide what stories you want critiqued!

If you have any continuations to a story I have previously critiqued, you may still post here, even though it's closed. This also includes edited versions of stories I have read - I love seeing the changes, so I encourage you to post again.

If I have told you that I will critique something of yours even if I'm closed, you may still post here. If I have not? Wait.

I do critique on FanFiction.net. I was there before here, just writing anything. I have since stopped posting on that site, but I continue to critique there, which is why you will see them listed here. I currently beta-read (critique) for six people over there, all relatively decent authors who allow me to rip their pieces to shreds as you do. xD

~JFW1415

Hiya! Please could you take a lok at mine:

Here.

If you need me to crit anything of yours, just say!

Thanks!

I'd be thankful if you could critique anything of mine really.

You choose

:]

I am sad, because I can't beg a critique for my romance since you've already critiqued it! Oh well.

If you're up to it, Diary of a Villain *hugs her baby* has a new prologue and I am looking for feedback on it. ^_^
Part 1: topic26581.html
Part 2: topic26947.html

I'll settle for only a review on the first part, though. =P

Thanks a bunch!

I'd love a couple more crit's on my prologue to decide whether I keep posting it.

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Thanks!

I could use more opinions on "The Monster" before I officially decide how I'm going to edit it:

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Thanks a lot if you do!

We all fall down

I'd be really appreciative if you could take a look at that. It's kind of random and has a lot of out-there metaphors, so if you don't like those kinds of things, here's something else:

Alphess: part one [revised as of 2008/03/11]

Thanks!

Hello, everyone! Me again. I have reviewed (most) of what have been posted on here for me, and many others by the same authors.

I have good news, though!

I will be on a major critiquing spree on Friday, when we have the day off for a teacher's workshop.

Please send me something to critique, and I will do so then! I really want another star!

You may send me as many pieces as you want; don't worry about being polite and only sending one thing. ;P

~JFW1415

I'm always up for getting a critique, thanks.

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This post has been edited as of 3/24/08. A lot has changed; I'm not as vague anymore. Please go check that out.

~JFW1415

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I'd appreciate a critique if you can! =]

Just a question... is there any rating you won't approach, like R or something?

Snoink: Oh, yeah, I forgot about that. I'll do any rating, just no graphic sex scenes. O.o If you imply something I probably won't mind.

I'll add that to the original post later on.

~JFW1415

Okay, okay... here is the link to the first part, though you don't have to start critiquing until part 3 or 4. The first few are good, my later ones need more loving. ^_^ But critique as you will!

Circus Pirates Part 1

Thank you!
~Yoyo

Since you asked.

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