Confessions

Thank you all

This beyond funny. It had great building up emotions and everything. It made my day.

dude you seriously had me fooled! i though you were about to spill some deep dark secret and all it wuz wuz you eating a donut! i busted out laughing at the end. keep writing cuz you're good... and srry about u failing your midterms

Hahahahha i really liked that you created a little suspense. I loved the end part it was a total surprise. Keep it up! This was really good.

In the words of the Russian on the Insight commercials, "This is epic win." lol. You literally had me rolling on the floor laughing. When i was reading this i was was thinking, "Aww man, another one of these deep, touchy-feely poems" but then I read the last line and i was like, "YESS!! that's how to write a poem. XD(<thats me laughing as I write this review type thingy)" Keep it up, broski(uni-sexual).

Bahahahahaha!!! Love this! Enough said! Brilliant!!!

At first I was a little confused, then I got the gist, then I thought something serious was going to happen, then I read the last line and it made me laugh. I liked the way I didn't actually know exactly what was going on until the very end, some people aren't so keen on that but the last line acted like a punchline and I thought that it was really effective. I really enjoyed it.

Haha, I really like this.. an anticlimax of sorts, and excellently penned one. I especially love the part about donuts. I am quite fond of donuts.
Anywho. Great voice throughout this- love the conversational tone. I really don't have much in the critical sense to say. Nice write.

-Coral-

Great poem.
Wonderful build-up - at first it seems like two people together, talking back and forth, in a way that would commonly imply an impending break-up. Instead, the last line wittily subverts the reader's expectations.

And you are you well?

Hahahahaha! oh, oh this is brilliant. I love it.

Hi,

This was very funny! I love the tone and the build-up to the revelation of the final line.

I'd change "for" as it doesn't quite fit in with the register here, and the same with "care for."

I'd tweak the first stanza a little because "Sit" suggests that the speaker is with her parents and the final two lines of teh stanza suggest that they are apart and talking on the phone. The fourth stanza also suggests that they are together so I think I'd go with that.

An enjoyable read overall.

Hope this helps,

Jas

LQTM (laughing quietly to myself). At the beginning it was a bit confusing what exactly was going on. I reread nearly every line over again until the very end which was quite amusing. Good job on this post Ziggiefred!
As a review it was flawless I didn't find any mistakes and flow was just a bit rocky (as you can imagine) but all and all it was fantastic.
Keep it up!