Hidee
Hidee has such a distinct personality. She’s someone whom I can confide in, no matter what. She’s always there for me, through thick and thin. Right here and right now, I’m going to define who she is.
Hidee is a quirky girl with a lot of spunk. She has a brain as big as Jupiter and it’s all filled with random knowledge. (That’s what happens when I get talking...) She’s a mischievous girl who always has another trick up her sleeve. Hidee is always begging for love.
This girl wants to be on the run, 24/7. She makes the most annoying noises as loud as she can. She always wants to play and will “attack” anything that moves. She will scratch you if you stop playing with her and wants to sit on your lap at the worst times ever, such as when you are reading. For some reason unknown to man, she likes to chew on rubber frogs. Whenever she’s around, our old cat runs and hides because Hidee is a bully to her.
Hidee has the most beautiful green eyes found underneath dark, slanted brows. Her short, black hair shrouds her face like a veil. This girl is the prettiest I have seen.
At times Hidee is a lazy girl, doing nothing all day; she can be over excited and rambunctious at times. No matter what she does though, she is amazing because of how distinct her personality is. This is only so amazing because of who she is. You see, Hidee, is my cat.
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Wow, I can't believe I didn't see that she was a cat!
I kept on thinking that she must be a little girl or something, silly me. It's definitely well written, and I laughed out loud at the end! I was really picturing an adorable little girl with short black hair and green eyes! I'd be happy to review some of your stuff if you ever need any help. I'll (hopefully) be online at the time. Oh, and I love your avatar!
Lol. By the third paragraph I was a bit confused but then suddenly everything clicked when I red "sit on your lap' If You want to make it confusing maybe that part could be left out. Or re-write it because it made me think of a pet and you probably wanted people to think it was a person (I assume), which you did in the first two.
Dang it! if I wasn't picturing a cat ( third paragraph gave it away) I would have really laughed it out at the end.
Ok, good suggestion. I'll take it into consideration.