Suffocation

Love it. This beautifully portrays the feeling of being trapped and stuck. How your feelings can suffocate you. overall hoping that you will find peace at some point.
"Yesterday's dreams have

become tomorrow's nightmares,' I read this as saying the things you hoped would happen in the future yesterday can become something you dread tomorrow. How inevitably things change and you begin to hate things you love. Maybe there is an underlying message about depression in this poem but I wont go to deep into it.
"I've lost all sunshine,

swamped in this monsoon," feeling as if you've lost all the light and hope in your light and you're trapped in the darkness and suffering. you're not, not until you learn to accept help or help yourself.
Interesting formating for the poem I don't quite understand the dotted lines but I assume there is purpose for them. Keep at it!

Hiya! Hop here to write her horribly structured reviews! Let's get to it!

I feel like this piece is very deep. Like I am drowning, going down further and further every word I read. Like I am gasping for air. It's like I am stuck, stuck in a deafening silence that promises to swallow me whole. That is what I love about your writing. It can be so simple yet it feels like it is so complex. The emotions intertwined into it.

The last 4 lines also hit me like a bullet. It's like after everything bad happens, the person still has hope. They cling onto that hope. Never letting it die.

Keep up the amazing work! Remember, keep being awesome!


Love,
Hop

Hello! Valkyria here to leave a short review for your work. Let's get into it:

I always enjoy reading your poetry! They're absolutely incredible. The imagery is simple, but it's full of drama and tragedy. I feel like this is a visual representation of someone getting pulled deeper and deeper into their own despair. It could be because they were betrayed, or they lost something very important to them. The juxtaposition of morning dew and sunshine being turned into something darker and sadder until it turns into actual dark subjects like nightmares, pollution, and caskets was brilliant. The last stanza is powerful and heartbreaking. It's a sharp contrast from the first stanza.

I enjoyed every part of this poem. Well done!

Hello Again, My Friend!

Ooo, another incredible poem! It feels like it opens so innocently, then slowly progresses into a more tragic visual of someone desperately trying to escape their world. The loss of sunshine, the polluted air, no sign of it getting better. It feels like the narrator has just lost their faith, be it faith in the world or faith in their own capacity.

I also loved the metaphor of air and breath. Starting with references to nature that feel pure and hopeful, and inherently make you think of fresh, sunny air. Then taking away the sun, and evoking the idea of pollution to corrupt the image, finally cutting it all off by suffocating in the casket...Very cool, very powerful ~

As for a technical review, I don't really have anything to remark on! But of course, I am no pro in poetry OR reviewing poetry, so please take any advice (or lack thereof) from me with a grain of salt.

As for my favorite parts, ooo...I would have to say:

Yesterday's dreams have

become tomorrow's nightmares,

Ooo. This is an interesting one.

Another short poem, but that's okay! Short and sweet can sometimes be good. And in this case, it was! A very deep poem. To me, it felt like this poem was written by someone during a tough time. The end made it feel almost like a letter being written to someone. I think that it was amazing. It made me feel a little sad reading it despite how short it is.

I don't really have any critiques. I did notice lines where they started with capitalization where the line before ended with a comma, but I thought that was a writer's choice, so I didn't think much of it.

Keep up the good work!