i love you

PERFECT....KEEP IT UP

hey there
this is truly sweet poem , it's quite enjoyable ...
i love how you used such simple expressions and words to write a very comprehensive and brilliant poem like this also how you relate love with nature it's lovely .
i'll start with some nitpicks
-"i know they won't be true....but i still smile when i go through."
this line is the longest one so you could make it like this :
"i know they won't be true
but i still smile when i go through."
-the capitalization is so important and you nedd to capitalize some words like "little , every ,how"
-the imagery is something missing in your poem and i'm sure if you add some it will make your poem more amazing .
now for my best parts and other :

"you can ask the sun and the moon,

you can ask the rainfall days and the sky,

only if they can speak.. "

this part is so good and deep it express everything sweet about love .

also i liked the expression "little" in the starting ( little illusions ..dreams..and wishes ) it flows really good .

overall ...

it's such a nice poem which talk and describe love in very unique way and how we can describe the moments of longing using the moon , sun .....
keep writing
smiley

Under the not so perfect grammar and that technical stuff is really a brilliant poem here. I won't do any nitpicking this time, but you won't escape- other reviewers have and will point out those errors.
The idea is wonderfully displayed of holding on to false hope and dreams, to illusions, knowing they are not real, but accepting them nevertheless. This is quite often our nature as humans.
The next thing I really admire about this work is that is takes a different approach to pathetic fallacy and personification, kind of forcing them in an odd and neat kind of way. Firstly, the rain is "singing" in this poem, which is abnormal, but it works for me. I prefer even foolishness to cliches (not that this if foolishness- it certainly is far from it). The first person persona is practically forcing the "you" in the poem to accept the idea of the natural elements recognizing and telling of this love. Still, the persona knows that he/she is tricking themselves, or trying to trick the person they profess to live. "only if they could speak" shows that although truth is known, illusion is accepted. This person knows that the rain and sky and sun and moon don't care about this love, and has no ability to speak of it.
This is a wonderful poem. Work on the technical stuff (and remember that an ellipsis contains three dots, not two or four- just in case those pseudo-ellipses weren't very intentional).
Good Stuff!
Keep writing!
Adam-Clay.

This is a lovely piece. It does a good job of expressing how you feel. I do, however, have a few nit-picks for you.

I am not sure if you meant to leave out the capitalization, but if you didn't, I would just quickly go through and capitalize the "I"s and the beginnings of the lines.

At the end of the line "little dreams i have when i close my eyesn," I think is supposed to be "eyes". Just a small typo.

The line that says "i know they won't be true....but i still smile when i go through," I think might work better if you split it into two lines. So, it would be something like, "i know they won't be true..../ but i still smile when i go through." A minor change, but I think it will help the flow of the poem.

I might also consider removing the exclamation points at the end of the second line. To me, they seem like distractions. I think that the poem would read just as well without them. However, it is your poem, this is just my opinion. If you think that they help express your thoughts, then keep them of course.

Those are just nit-picks. Your poem is very nice! Keep writing.

--Grey