Hey yadanialler, Shauzer here reviewing
Nice poem, it was a good idea. I liked the main character, everybody's had a serious crush at some point so it's a nice topic that everyone can relate to. The English, despite your warning, wasn't bad at all. There was only one line when I noticed something wrong, when you said 'you shout with all what you got'. This should either be 'with all you got' or 'with all that you have' or with all that you got' Just a minor mistake. As the reviewer before me said, 'he had many friends, there was no need for new.' was a great line. It was the one where i stopped and said, 'this poem could actually be good' I did not like the way you said 'I'M IN LOVE WITH YOU'!!!. Aside from the exclamation marks, it was kind of a newbie thing to do. It seemed drastic, completely out of the flow of the poem. I liked the last line of the poem, the way you introduced it after the 'and you?' was lovely, it gave it just the right feeling. One more thing I didn't like was the way you wrote the third and fourth last lines. They were different than the rest and it doesn't read write. The second line isn't too bad because of what it actually says, but the sky line... I just didn't like it. Both lines should be spaced out more, and although I like the idea behind the sky line, it should be worded differently.
Everything else, I think, was okay. The overall flow was nice, my favourite line was 'he had many friends, there was no need for new.' I thought this was the best my miles, it was just so smooth. Thanks for a good read.
Keep writing.
Yours in ink,
TS.

This poem is so cute. I like the idea you have behind it and how you slowly developed the general theme of the poem. Though you can work on your capitalization, overall, the poem itself compensates for minor errors.

he had many friends, there was no need for new.

"I'M IN LOVE WITH YOU"!!!

Hi Catcha01 here with a review and first off I absolutely LOVE this poem.
I related to this poem so well. I've been in an unrequited love you could call it such as this described in your poem. It flowed nicely and you easily conveyed your point across to your audience.
I was like swooning as I read it and awing all the way through. Once again I love it. Please continue to write! ^^
Happy Writing!
~Catcha01

Hey there! I LOVE THIS POEM! It is so true and I can almost see the process you so nicely describe.
I also like how you make this poem is all lower-case, somehow it makes it more... innocent and puts you more into the place of the girl who is trailing behind the boy.

There are a few little things that I would suggest though, and they are just my opinions.
The first things is, I think that the line:
"was he too deaf to hear your heartbeats?" would perhaps sounds and flow a bit better if it were:
"was he too deaf to hear your beating heart?" I personally prefer that, but it's your poem
Also perhaps the fourth and third last line, you could make breaks in them where you put commas so this: "poured down its icy tears," and "what you tried so hard to tell." on a new line perhaps.

Overall, your grammar and spelling is perfect to what I could see and I generally love this poem. One of my favourites on this site for sure! GREAT JOB!
-CFG