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I read this story a while back but not on this site or from this author. If you can't write your own stories don't steal other peoples work and pretend it is yours.
Please remove this story. You did not write it. You stole it and are saying you are the author, which you are not. http://stories.xnxx.com/story/34689/The ... ok_edition) is the original from which you stole this. Thank you.
Post more please haha I'd hate to be left hanging! I'm really liking the story!
A very interesting ending to chapter 5. I liked the whole of the story so far, but I only decided to comment on the last chapter you have written so I can review the whole novel so far. Apart from some parts of it which made me laugh from the akwardness, it is very good. The grammar and punctuation is overall very good, apart from one or two typos. The story in general is very Eragon-ish, apart from some big changes, i.e. It's a girl instead of a boy, and she was already a dragon rider/tamer from the start instead of the dragon not bothering to hatch for ages until the right one comes about. Which technically means they've been chosen. But still. Anyway, your talent for describing comes through very well. It made me feel very empathetic towards Sre. It also made me want to kill Jeboc, and I am glad that Hero got in first as I might have done worse stuff to Jeboc than a newly hatched baby dragon could do.
Well done in your writing and I hope you will finish this soon as I wonder if she meets up with her lover. I wish for big things for you.
not bad. Got a bit lost at the start. I thought you had missed a bit. It sorted itself out with Blacks arrival though. Shame you are not putting anymore up. This is really interesting and I am keen to know what happens about the Commander. A very well done story and very gripping. You have a real talent.
Please post more
I wanna know what happens to Sre!
I'm in too lazy a mood to do a full, nitpicky review. Maybe when you post more? Because I REALLY hope you do.
I love the story so far- really. It's like a gritty reboot of Eragon or something.
Also, the sex scene was great. Not too dirty, not too clean.