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I really like this chapter, especially all the attention paid to the dragons. (I am a fangirl). One thing I noticed though, "a mute point" should actually be "moot." Minor spelling error. Also "Sre could almost not hear him" might flow better "Sre almost couldn't hear them." Going to read the next chapter now!

Getting better the more I read and this is only chapter two. Really like the commander. Great detail and wonderful setting. This is a really good story. Still with the sense of mystery. Brings to mind cinderella with the evil step sisters and the loving prince

I loved this, as it is another great chapter. I only spotted one typo which was at one point living area was spelled lviing area. Other than that I couldn't spot anything to improve, but then I am terrible at reviewing punctuation and such. I think that this piece goes well with the first chapter. Good Work and keep writing

- apple96