Hi whatchamacallit! hannah here for a quick review. I hope it is helpful!Ooh wow, this was so fun to read! I don't even know what to say, it was descriptive, metaphoric and overall wonderful.My favorite lines were probably these:"the ants tiptoe around my / toes.usually my leg bounces / with unspent anxiety, but now / it is still, like a confident pebble / laying where all can see it / on the warm gravel path."It just gave me such a picturesque scene in my head.One thing is this line:"the ants tiptoe around my / toes."I feel like the suffix/word "toe" was a bit repetitive, unless it was supposed to be that way.Thanks so much for writing this! I hope this review was helpful, that you keep writing and have a great day!Sincerely,hannah0528
Loving your love for prose poetry recently! And the last two lines are ~chef's kiss~ <3
there is a skill in knowing what to chase / and when to exchange smirks from a distance
ants crawling by, hesitant like I am / some goddess, and I let them / for I am my own goddess.
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