Young Writers Society

Hello again! After reviewing the first chapter, I've come to have a look at this.
So, from what I can tell, this is a self help guide aimed at adults who want to turn their lives. The text itself is very well written, I didn't notice any grammar issues or anything like that. I thought that the Rhetorical questions were very effective, it flowed well.

I'd like to see how you could make this book unique and different to others of its kind. I've read a few magazine articles and online blogs with similar contents and they all tend to sound the same. What's different about this one? Why would an audience chose to read this instead of another book by someone else?

This is quite a short review because I didn't find much to comment on, but I've tried to give you useful advice all the same. I really enjoyed the first chapter, and now I've read this it makes a little more sense. I'm looking forward to the second chapter and I hope I can review that too. Keep Writing!
Ebony

Hmm. I'm not quite sure what to think about this. It's written *very* well, don't get me wrong, but I'm not sure about who the target audience is. As in, if this is for sell in a store or something, it may be hard to get people to buy unless you were a famous person. Nobody wants to feel like they're being preached to. Not that that's what I think this is like so far cause I don't, but at the same time I could see other people reading this and feeling that way. So, I think my suggestion for this is to take out this prologue and just start with the first chapter with you writing about your mistakes. This is all my opinion so do whatever you want, of course, but I think a book about the mistakes and failures someone has made would be really interesting as long as it doesn't turn into a book of advice. Something that just talks about what happened and what *you* learned from it without talking directly to the audience giving advice about it, you know. I don't know if I'm making much sense, lol.

But, like I said this is your book so you do whatever you think is best. This is just my opinion to think about as a reader.

This all being said, I think the actual writing of this itself is quite good. It all flows together well. But it doesn't feel--and hopefully this doesn't make you mad because I don't mean it to offend you--interesting. And maybe it's just me and it'll be interesting to other types of people, but for me personally, I would not want to continue reading after this point in the book.

So that's all I really have to say, I guess my advice is to just start the book with a story of a mistake or failure you made/had instead of this prologue. Hopefully this didn't sound to harsh or anything because it does have a lot of potential and it's a great place to start. If you need any help with anything, just want to talk, have questions, want me to review something else, whatever, just let me know and I'd be happy to. Good job and good luck!