Her husband had a no color on face policy ,it came to her mind to change it,
that very morning her lips wore a Flaming Red!
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Hey! Just a short review for a short work~
I was very confused when reading this. Not only was your grammar and punctuation a little messed up but also the face you wrote it, the words, made it confusing. The story was hard to understand what was happening.
I've never heard of micro fiction before. I didn't even know it was a thing xD isn't this just a short story? Anyway I think if you rewrite this with clearer words and more words it would be more understandable.
Sorry that this was so negative,
Alice ♥
Hey there urvikavyas. It's just lizzy dropping by real quick, so without a further ado, let the reviewing begin.
Welcome to YWS! Congrats on publishing what I am guessing is your second or third piece. Well the second in your series of micro-fiction. And that brings me to my first point.
What exactly is micro-fiction? Is like an even shorter version of flash fiction? Like just one sentence based off of a particular subject. I'm guessing the subject has something to do with colors or maybe just red because of the emphasis on the shade. This is a pretty good way to introduce your piece because it made me wondering what exactly micro-fiction was.
No space is needed in between policy and the comma. Also I think the policy would go better if hyphenated.
Even with the hyphens it doesn't sound quite right, like you need a "the" in there. Did you have a word limit or something for the sentence?
The caps in the middle of the sentence were of course for emphasis but it looks odd. You could actually give it color. Here's one possible shade.
Well that's about all I have for this review. Sorry if I couldn't offer anymore words of advices/comments, that it depending on how you take them.
Have a nice day.
Lizzy
Queen of the Book Clubs
I think it would make sense if you said "no-color-on-face" policy
I don't really get it. Some woman's husband doesn't want her to wear makeup, but she decided to anyways. What's the story written for? Is it written to convey symbolism, or action, or drama, or what?
Its written for a festival of my state where we play with colors .
Oh, that context makes sense.