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I slid into my chair at the kitchen table. As I waited for breakfast I picked up the newspaper that was sitting on the table. The first words I noticed when I opened it were "Kevin Jonas." I groaned and pulled the newspaper away from my face. I couldn't believe I'd lived in New Jersey for a year and hadn't managed to meet the Jonas Brothers yet. I started to read again. "Mom!" I screamed. The Jonas' were looking for a nanny to go on tour with them for this summer, 2014, and help Danielle with their baby boy who'd be turning a year old in July.
At the interview I told Kevin and Dani about my experience watching my baby brother and cousins and how, since I love them, I’d be more loyal than their other candidates.
I jump and am startled from my flashback as the door slams and Nick gets on the tour bus. "Oh, hey, you scared me," I tell him.
"Sorry," he smiles, "Everyone's coming soon."
"Okay," I smile back at him.
“Hey, can I play something for you?” he asks me.
“Absolutely,” I say, excited. He grabs a guitar and we sit down and he plays me his new song.
“It’s beautiful,” I tell him when he finishes.
"It’s about you. Listen Jules, before they get here, I have to tell you something." I nod, and notice his eyes have turned very intense. "I'm in love with you, I have been since Kevin and Dani introduced us and I wish the tour wasn't over so we could still be together all of the time. Being on tour with you has been amazing. I love to see you in the crowd when I’m on stage. I know you have to go to college now and-"
I smile the biggest smile in history and interrupt to tell him, "Nick, I'm in love with you too." And he smiles and then kisses me.
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This piece is really good and I really liked it.
I also like the way you described the flash back, although I had to read it twice before I clearly understood what was happening. Other than that, this is really great and you should definitely keep writing!
~Sharitm2
Wow! I love this! It had me sitting on the edge of my sit!!! I love the Jonas Brothers too! I loved reading this!!! You should post more stuff like this because I would love to read them
I like it. All tough it may seem silly but on the other hand, I really like how one express herself. This is main thing in writing. Being sincere isn't always easy, but when writer overcomes it - the beautiful world opens.
This is really nice, it says something about you, it makes reader feel positively towards you (I already do, you're cute! (and I don't even like them brothers).
This kind of fantasy may have any girl, but the way you describe it - is beautiful. It's simple, cute and funny
Well, I do hope your dream comes true, at least to meet Nick. ^_^
I am a fan of them too
I like their old stuff better though x) Nice little fantasy going on here ^.^