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Quite the fast-food chain, you are.
Undertaking the art of sub-making
In this competitive market. With
Zeal you conduct combat with your
Nemesis, Subway. But alas, they'll
Overtake you always, due to your overpriced
Subs and shameful advertisements.
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Oh my goodness! I read your poem Pocket Change then saw this one's title and had to read it. I worked at a Quiznos for 2 and a half years, so I absolutely love this poem. You capture the emotion and anger Quiznos has with the ultimate enemy... Subway. Your acrostic has very consistent line lengths except the 6th line which sticks out a bit. You could take out the word "your" and it wouldn't stick out as much.
In the restaurant I worked in we actually had a "Quiznos Acrostic Poem" that was framed on the wall, I can't remember all that it said but your version is a lot more entertaining to read.
Also just to clarify Quiznos is a (self-described) "quick-order restaurant" so it's a bit more sophisticated than a "fast-food chain" that you classified it as.
Good luck in future writing and have a good day!
~alliyah
Thank you!
You're welcome!
These poems are all very clever and adorable.
I really love how comedic it is. Woooonderful job. I love how you sum up just random subjects in these small acrostic poems. 
I like it. I don't think I've ever been to Quizno's. Anyways, good work!
-Liz
Thanks for the review! I actually have never eaten there, I am a Subway gal, but I have looked around their reviews and their commercials and subs. Many not good, and thumbs way down on the commercials! But a good number of people like them, so I guess is depends on the restaurant you go to?
Haha, this is hilarious! an ode to Quiznos; how refreshingly original and unique! I take it you are fond of the place?
Well, because of its brevity, I don't have many nitpicks, but here's what I have: (My notes are in bold)
I think the format is very clever (the classic scheme of letter poem, in a new, and artistically creative way), and, as mentioned earlier, the topic is intensely unique! The grammer is very good, and I especially like the part at the end where, after all the sympathies, you show your true opinion!
Great job!! I love a good, brief piece!