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I like it!
A few spelling/grammar mistakes, like "Gental" should be "Gentle" and "orchrastra" shouls be "orchestra." A few things don't make much sense.... "The cruel gental wind" is an oxymoron- gentle and cruel are opposites.
I love the theme of dancing to no music. It's a nice start! Just start checking it over.
I love your metaphors though- you are a lot better than most!
~Amberstar786~
thanks for the helpful feed back! ^^
and for the compliment ^^