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Ugh, I forgot to click the review button! This is the same as the other one I posted, just a review.
Amazing poem! I always love positive poems, as they are in short supply lately. Many people think sad, depressing poems are better, but I always have thought the world needs more positive people like you. Also, I enjoy a nice, short poem now and then. It sticks with me longer than one of those exceedingly long epics.
Everything that I said above, push it aside for now. There is always a way to make a poem better, sadly. For example, you described everything about the smile except for what it looks like. Of course, you didn't need to, as everyone (hopefully) knows what a smile looks like. I love the ending, so no matter what, don't change it!!!
Okay, now you can bring back the compliments. Keep them. They're yours. You've rightfully earned them! But always keep criticism, too. You never know when you can use it.
This is a wonderful poem! Keep writing happy poems! Keep writing in general!
You're really good!
Sincerly,
Heidi
Awe thank you! ^^ I always like things that can make people happy
I did play around with the idea of describing a smile, but there are just so many different types, so I figured if there was no discription it could be more universal
And thank you for all the complements and critisms, there greatly valued:)
--Roxy
Amazing poem! I always love positive poems, as they are in short supply lately. Many people think sad, depressing poems are better, but I always have thought the world needs more positive people like you. Also, I enjoy a nice, short poem now and then. It sticks with me longer than one of those exceedingly long epics.
Everything that I said above, push it aside for now. There is always a way to make a poem better, sadly. For example, you described everything about the smile except for what it looks like. Of course, you didn't need to, as everyone (hopefully) knows what a smile looks like. I love the ending, so no matter what, don't change it!!!
Okay, now you can bring back the compliments. Keep them. They're yours. You've rightfully earned them! But always keep criticism, too. You never know when you can use it.
This is a wonderful poem! Keep writing happy poems! Keep writing in general!
You're really good!
Sincerly,
Heidi
Hello, eyeofthestorm here with your review.
Wow, my username really is a mouthful. Just call me Storm.
Okay, back to the poem. I usually don't like short poems, especially if they're really good, for tow reasons. First, they make me jealous because I'm not very good at writing short poems. Secondly, the better they are the longer I want them to be and I'm always sad when they're over.
Aside from my wanting to read more, this is a really nice piece. I have a hard time putting positive emotions into words and I envy you because you obviously can.
Thanks for posting!
--Storm
Hello! I do like the username though!
Im sure if you practiced them you can get better
thank you though!
--Roxy